All Comments on 'Amor Fabula'

That was so hot!!!!! I love it when a guy gets rough like that! Five stars! I hope you update really soon!

Very good start, but a good editor could make it even better. For example, I think you meant time is relative.

Five.

Very nice start. Very nice use of imagery. Like this part "Like taking a bite out of an over ripe piece of fruit, juices dribbled down his mouth as his face moved away." I was like daaaaamn!! Lol you got some skills. I think you'd benefit from an editor, they can help you smooth out the grammar kinks and typos. Other than that very nice. Please continue writing I'd love to see where this goes.

lol, I was going to submit my online story that i have been working on for a little minute but after reading yours...this was way HOT!

Oh man...oh man...what a way to open up! Sweating! Hot! Hot! Next man...next! Im droolin here!

Please continue