by SpringBreezes
Thank you for apt parallels , Ms. SpringBreeze !!
A little late in writing but the praise is everlasting. Beautiful, sensual, moving and deep. You master words and play with them. Thank you. Xxxxxx
Just perfect. So beautiful, sensual and captivatingly lovely. You evoke so much in so few words. Very well done.
Well thought out conceptually, great use of metaphor, sensuality, could probably find a different word to glistening to freshen it up a little, you interlinked the theme very well, smooth read. Your use of sound is strong as always,
Suggest switch
Tasting the chase
To
Taste the chase
Works better sonically and strengthens the word taste.
Maybe change clasp to gasp similar sound but a bit more illuminating than clasp.
Thank you for another string read