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by Anonymous

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by Reltne11/22/04

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Would you change this line if you were writing it now?
"before I could feel"

Would: "before I was born" make it stronger?

I don't use the thermo-thingee

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by LeBroz11/30/06

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Tight little piece from deep in Lit's vault.
'Before I could feel' says more
Than a 'before I was born' cliché;
Let it stand as written.

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by duddle14602/10/07

Word nuggets.

A mysterious snippet to confound.

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by LeBroz02/22/07

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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,500 poems.



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by tazz31707/21/12

TO STAY DORMANT

allows the bird to survive, TK U MLJ LV NV

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