All Comments on 'Brave New World'

after

a few more periods (one?)

well the most intelligent rant I've ever seen

S2 jumps a little too much

but the first two lines nails it

5ed

I like how facile the writing is--overall the read is smooth as silk--although I agree with 1201 that the first strophe is more balanced than the second. The refrain keeps it all together though. I think maybe if you cut each strophe by 2-4 lines the poem would have more punch. Just my opinion, of course. :)

Overnight split up into Serbia , Croatia , Bosnia ..... Etc. ...er ....Kosovo .... , 5-ed .

pass the pint, "don't worry-be hoppy"

You got that right! That's the world we live in, and the older ones among us, even those of us who have adapted the technology to our lives, don't belong. We're for the simpler pleasures, for the warmth of human contact. God bless us everyone! :)