by Sonatatre
- This is not how you indicate dialog I point out to you in a manner that's going to confuse just about everyone who reads this, since we don't know when your actual spoken dialog has ended and your unspoken, inner dialog has started.
"This is how you indicate dialog," I tell you, hoping you get a fucking clue.
It's a good story, but your grammar is horrible!!! Consider an editor for your next story....otherwise, this could easily use several more chapters!!
Oh to have a girlfriend like that! Awsome. Really looking forward to the next issue. What's going to happen with her parents?????
Yes what's going on with her parents get more toys &more bondage things tell quen to buy some sex toys &some bondage stuff but add a b&m s&m
A great story that just begs for more. Soon, please - I'm getting older!
Yes, the normal way to indicate dialogue is "". But I guess if your first language isn't English, you may have other conventions. I for one had no problem deciphering the dialogue, and for me, the story is far more important than minor quibbles about format. Please keep going.
I want to be Gwen. I would often cry when mistress is away at school but when she is home life would be wonderful