All Comments on 'My Girlfriend Made Me Do It'

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wolf9696wolf9696almost 11 years ago

really liked it.....will look to see a ch 2

SomethingInTheWaySheMovesSomethingInTheWaySheMovesalmost 11 years ago
You're going to hear this a lot: USE QUOTATIONS WHEN YOU'RE SUPPOSED TO.

- This is not how you indicate dialog I point out to you in a manner that's going to confuse just about everyone who reads this, since we don't know when your actual spoken dialog has ended and your unspoken, inner dialog has started.

"This is how you indicate dialog," I tell you, hoping you get a fucking clue.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Get an Editor!!!!

It's a good story, but your grammar is horrible!!! Consider an editor for your next story....otherwise, this could easily use several more chapters!!

Paxo1944Paxo1944almost 11 years ago
Quite a good start

Oh to have a girlfriend like that! Awsome. Really looking forward to the next issue. What's going to happen with her parents?????

w8ingnoww8ingnowalmost 11 years ago
Good start

This is a great story. I hope you continue to build on it!

animaluver40animaluver40almost 11 years ago
Great begining

Yes what's going on with her parents get more toys &more bondage things tell quen to buy some sex toys &some bondage stuff but add a b&m s&m

bumblegrumbumblegrumover 10 years ago
Wow, This Is Good

A great story that just begs for more. Soon, please - I'm getting older!

Yes, the normal way to indicate dialogue is "". But I guess if your first language isn't English, you may have other conventions. I for one had no problem deciphering the dialogue, and for me, the story is far more important than minor quibbles about format. Please keep going.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Just terrible

Could it have been less believable?

liz33ndliz33ndabout 7 years ago
yummy story

lots of twists and I love it, great writing and seduction

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Great story please write the next part soon

4yourpleasureiam4yourpleasureiamover 1 year ago

I want to be Gwen. I would often cry when mistress is away at school but when she is home life would be wonderful

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I like to write stories. For those of you who enjoy them, I am very grateful. You inspire me to write more. I am quite bad at finding the time to write though. Those who wait for something good, does not wait in vain. My name here comes from Sonata, that means melody, and tre...