You're actually a decent writer; it just sucks that you feel you need to share your severe mental problems that with us.
One star, fuck face.
I'm starting my stories with a warning. I have some very very weird fetishes, but thank you for the feedback.
First part of this was really amazin but chapter 2 is just awful just jumps around so much I'd suggest just stop there cause looks like this is just going to keep going down hill
I really enjoyed chapter 1, but as someone else mentioned you jumped around a bit and I didn't know one thing from another.
Pity this really had potential.
Very good ch.2, you're one of my favorite writers on here - the torture of Eric was surprisingly awesome (favorite part - except the bi-thing but whatevz ^^), not usualy my thing but that was sadistically well written >:D
Another thing i like about the story is the suspension of belief, way to many erotic writers are so boringly realistic :P Cheers
...at this rate, they'll control the entire TOWN!
This was great! I mean, I really loved part 1, but this just blew it away! I loved that you transformed/converted a relatively conservative wife, whereas the first part involved someone already evilly sexy.
I too, enjoyed the torment of Eric and thought it was one the story's biggest highlights. I especially loved the last scene where his own mother turns against him. I wonder just how Veronica's husband will react, and how they'll take "care" of him (hehehe)!
Your descriptions are fantastic ('specially the violent and sexual scenes), and I love your dialogue! I will admit that at times, Veronica's thoughts do seem to jump around alittle, but I actually like that, as it adds a tinge of evil insanity that well fits her well after she's been exposed to Bobby, especially her domineering attitude while at the same time being convinced that she could get Bobby to fall in love in her, almost like an (evil) lovestruck teenager.
I'm glad you posted this all at once. I was a bit worried when you hadn't posted anything for awhile and thought that, like many other fine authors, you'd given up on your stories. I almost wished that you just posted the chapters as individual stories and strung us along, but reading this in one go was well worth the wait instead!
Thank you for this! You're now one of my favorite literotica authors!
awesome story ... this is pure unadulterated fantasy ... and a brilliant fantasy at that ... loving how hot and free the story is so far and look forward to more
Like how the teacher & the slutty Lilly talked and fucked. Liked what they did to
Veronica. Especially liked how Veronica herself stepped on er son's balls. Just wish
this Bobby, wsn't such a fuckingasshole to the whores whp were helping him. HIS
CHARACTER, WAS WHAT PREVENTED THIS FROM BEING A GEAT STORY.(Next
chapter tone him down a bit.)
The next chapter is where they Fuck & rape the principle. And they rape the 2
patheic cuckhold huisbands.-EATANDBEMERRY
Can we please get more stories set in wet valley high
This author really knows how to write good stories. I especially enjoy when evil woman like the main characters here fall trap to their own libido. Hopefully there will be more of this
Not every day I read something that atrocious.
In general, I like your writing style, and I like your stories. The exception is any story involving Bobby. I don't like him, or any of the women in the stories. I don't mind your other mind-break stories, but the Bobby ones piss me off more than anything else.
Hey don't worry about anything just keep on writing please I need more you have a special talent don't let it go to waste,thank you
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