All Comments on 'Taken by darkness'

of obsession and darkness

this is good:

she undresses

a completely counterfeit smile

which makes this a bit redundant:

which seeks both to deceive and deny

excellent:

it is the meeting of harsh instruments

question:

taken by darkness

as the main phrase and title

It's rather spare and I feel there aren't wasted words. I'm not overly fond of ending with ellipsis points: not sure what purpose they serve. I might move a few line breaks and tinker a bit otherwise, but really I'm nitpicking as these may just be my preferences. Overall I like that the poem is so open to interpretation because there is (to me) a clear erotic story being told here, but also a thematic message about appearance and deception. Really good stuff SO. Thank you for the read. :-)

@ your undoubted mastery over this format --5-ed !