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The Rebellious Slave Ch. 22

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by Anonymous

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by Sparklee05/12/13

Obsession

Clearly I'm obsessed. I always catch the chapters when they finally load!

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Crikey...... that was hot.

I was torn between the two but now I know I'm a Ben fan and Arlington can go jump.

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by Anonymous05/12/13

This...

This right here is fucking delicious. First....you HAVE to do a story on Charlotte and Elandra. No ifs and buts get on it lmao (not telling you....really me asking.) 2 I looked up the models and Arlington character...to put it simplest I would lick that man dry. I hope to find out more about his lordship's past. Also the chick telling them to participate in the negotiations doesn't seem to realize what a disaster that will be. Now Ben...I would smother his body in cream. I love how he takes charge. Alyssa grew on me...she knows she is a bitch and if there was a chain big enough she would rock it. I respect that. Greenwood...is so funny. Love what you weaved here and keep it up Hispet. By the way...question. Was Ms. Timmons caught as well as Avery (who is a little weakling btw)?

P.S. I don't blame the man for choosing Elandra. Charlette is a pathetic twat who wears too much lipstick and has no humanity left. Least Arlington treated his slaves like people. She treats hers like...I cant even think of something...when I do I will get back to you.

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Hell Yeah

Got so excited when I saw this. Thank you

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by Sparklee05/12/13

LOVE IT. HATE THE WAIT haha

Seriously such a great addition and the wait was worth it because you delivered!!!!! I'm screaming right now lol but is it bad that I don't want this story to have a happy ending for Kara and Ben? I mean Arlington had her first.

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by Dodobird0805/12/13

OMG yes finally!!!

Well worth the wait! I gotta say though, that Ben fucking Kara scene was super hot. I kept imagining Chris Hemsworth - i just can't seem to get Chris Evans to fit Ben! xD If I were Kara I'd go for for Ben and be done with it, but the part of me that wants to read a longer (more interesting IMO) story really wants to see how Kara and Arlington resolve their relationship and get together even if that seems impossible or unrealistic.

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by Yourstruly1505/12/13

love it so much. but im soo torn..love the chapter. very Hot!!....but i want Arlington to get her. Yes i admit it. I really really wanted arlington to get his hands on kara. He had her first lol....such a fan of this story. kept it up @hisPet21

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by rainshine1905/12/13

conflicted

I can't help but feel like Kara is cheating on Arlington (even though I know he has other sex slaves to sate his needs). Although this ending scene with Ben and Kara makes me all wet, it just felt out of character. Ben is the nice guy and nice guys finish last. I was glad he rescued Kara, but if it weren't for his pressing the situation, Kara wouldn't have left.

I am an Arlington fan and can't wait to hear his reaction from listening to Kara memory enhancement. Hmm I just just imagine him stroking himself while listening to her orgasm...or better yet, have Alice get him off.

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by inspector12305/12/13

I am in heaven ......

It is late where I am but I checked lit before going to bed and chapter 22 was up so of course I had to stay up and read it. Thank you, thank you, thank you for taking my suggestion of using Arlington's picture for target practice. It was hilarious. I thought you did a great job of describing the conflicting emotions that Kara is going through. The sex scene between Kara and Ben was hot! This was logical since our heroine needed another strong male lead to vie for her attention and to show her that there is a different side to the relationship other than the dark side that Arlington was showing her. This is your story so you decide who Kara ends up with . If Kara does end up with Arlington I hope he finally shows that he has some redeeming qualities and that it is her choice and not because of betrayal of Nardia or slave hunters dragging her back kicking and screaming! Another five stars from me!

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Ben more than a sidekick and Arlington needs to step it up.

Brilliantly done ! You have elevated Ben to an actual competitor of Arlington in my view. By having the intelligence and capacity to make Kara actually deal with her ordeal, I see him for the first time in this light, as a potential real suitor, and not just as a slight distraction.

I love that Kara will have the occasion to meet face to face with Lord Arlington on equal terms. I was getting worried that he has been over and done with - as Kara's psyche gets stronger and distance itself of A due to the shooting practice, with shutting the phone in his face and the acceptance of Kara's sexuality. But during the negotiations I can see there is space to have a more varied interraction between K and A. Which I think is badly needed, since Arlington has not done much yet to meet Kara mid-way and actually be able to have a relationship with her. I am still rooting for Arlington, but if he doesn't behave ... at least a little bit...

So, I am very much looking forward to see how you will tackle Arlington's bad temper and inspire Kara to look at him through a different perspective.

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Awesome!!!

I've waited for this for forever! I think Arlington should begin to see the huge chance of him losing to Ben (which I do not want) and start to court her like a real man. I can only imagine the hot seduction hes gonna put her through when she's his hostess!

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by Anonymous05/12/13

I'm impressed

This is the first chapter that has made me view Ben as a threat. Yes I'm an Arlington fan and I want him to win so badly, though how you're going to redeem him in the eyes of Kara is beyond me (hint hint: cough-I-want-Arlington-to-win-cough)
Anyway keep up the good work, I wouldn't view Ben as a threat if it wasn't for your amazing writing. Before he was more of a pain in the neck, now you have me worried. I look forward to the next installment, 5 stars from me.

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by Ellienora3505/12/13

Totally in love with Ben

He waited until he got her consent, then he ahowed her what she really needed. The last scene was perfect. I loved it. Once she talks things about Arlington through with Ben, she will be strong enough to show Arlington just how strong she is. And you have made for a beautiful showdown. You have also taught Kara how to shoot well and stand up for herself. It will be beautiful when he shows Arlington her self confidence. He will want her more after that. Tons of shivvers. I hope chapter 23 is on its way. I want o read it badly.

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by HelplessFlower05/12/13

More more more...!

This is my first time commenting, although I have been reading for quite a while. This story is so brilliant, HisPet21, that I felt I needed to express my praise properly!

Really looking forward to the next chapter, and I do confess that I am hoping Arlington gets hold of Kara again soon. The anticipation is killing me! Not that anticipation is a bad thing of course...

Anyway, just wanted to say brilliant work HisPet21! I may have to re-read the entire series (again!) to get my TRS fix until chapter 23 is ready. Yes, that definitely sounds like a plan!

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by Anonymous05/12/13

AWESOME!!!

there's no way I can wait another week for the next chapter! How much would we all have to pay you to quit your day job and just write 24/7!!?? Seriously, you are AMAZING!

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by EuphoriaSlam6905/12/13

Oh My Goddess! Fuck me lewdly on the forest floor!

How do you keep getting better and better with each chapter! Outrageous!!! Such story telling magnificence!!! 5*

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by kitty567005/12/13

HOT!

All I can say is that was WELL worth the wait!!!! Hot Hot Hot!!!!!

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by girl_in_despair05/12/13

Something clicked in Kara.. and me!

Your stories are amazing but this one is a whole other level! The way you wrote of Ben's affection towards Kara gave me goosebumps. Your characters are all great. Can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks!

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by Arakhne05/12/13

But

No no no... Not Karrington :(
He is too good, too perfect.

Still, compliments for the writing as well as a good eye for detail through the storyline, as usual.

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by pheobecharmed05/12/13

super hot

Loved this chapter ben definatly stepped it up a notch. That scene at the end was spectactular. We didn't get kara talking to arlington just one way but sthat was still heated.love the chapter keep it up:-)

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Yay!

Amazing as always

Great plot and character development, especially Ben. He seems like he could fit with Kara now, although I will want to see Arlington get her again, even temporarily.

Just one thing- Kara doesn't ask about her parents and if they are OK or even alive until she's been back like a whole day? Doesn't fit with her character and the picture you painted earlier of her relationship with her parents. I think she would ask about them as soon as she was safely inside Nardia. Also she had a friend in Nardia, Maria I think? The one she texted from Arlington's phone. Where is she?

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by Evilpandaqueen05/12/13

loving that Kara is in a healthy relationship

I don't understand the Ben haters, and why people want her to end up with Arlington. He's not a true Domme you can't view a man who kidnaps, rapes, and tortures as one. A real Domme earns a submissive s trust, and ultimately it's the submissive with the real power because they can say no. So no I don't want to see her with Lord Douchebag. I think Kara needs to stand up to him, because really Kara is much too headstrong to submit. And besides, Ben gets her, and treats her like a person, not an object. Love it can't wait for the next up date. Don't take so long next time please though. I need my fix lol.

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by tati8905/12/13

Ben's hotdometer has been raised 100%!

The first 5 pages were great storytelling! Kara getting to see the sunrise, eating frogs, getting a hangover, querren being cute domestic diva making pancakes lol, bonding time over cards..great stuff and character development. It's things like these that really makes your characters endearing and not just great looking people having sex like most stories on here. It makes us readers care about them. :) I'm starting to warm up to alyssa's no bullshit and I dont give a shit attitude and greenwood is just a wise old teddy bear.

The 6th page was just unexpected and steaming hot! Thank you for raising ben's hotdometer! Kara finally got to tap Ben's fine ass...although it's more like he got to tap her fine ass. :p I liked Ben before but now I really love him. Dont get me wrong A is still a sexy ass beast who I wouldnt fuck with and would love to fuck...and I'm still a fangirl, but Ben was just damn hot (esp when like another commenter picturing chris hemsworth powerfully slamming into kara on the forest floor) *goes into lunatic fangirl mode* I cant imagine Ben or A. backing down now that they both think of kara as "my girl" (heart flutters and squees) which can only mean that one of them will be hurt..and hurt badly. If how A treated Avery is any indication of the man's cruelness, imagine what he would do to Ben. Ben also did kill men with his bare hands...so someone is going to really be hurt..ouch. O.o I can imagine our dark lord trying to be cool, collected, and calm once he sees Ben with Kara. Not only did Ben make A kneel, claimed kara as his girl, and he even hung up on our dark lord as a last fuck you..hehe. Why cant we all just be friends? Jp :p

Ps: Kara and Ben didnt use protection..hmmmm

Ps: I'm pretty sure that kara didnt ask about her parents simply because she was just very very tired and didnt have a chance to speak to querren privately. Maria was the one who helped her parents get to a safe place so I'm sure she's okay as well.

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by tati8905/12/13

forgot to add...

I do see his lord amused at kara's videotape. I dont see him using it to get off when he has a sea of beauties at his disposal. He likes kara but I cant see him using just her voice to really get off...seems out of character for such a cool and collected military man...and he better not make poor alice join in. Not only would he violently use her but to know that he's using her body and thinking of another girl and hearing about it..alice deserves better than that and arlington wouldnt be so cruel right?

Ps: Enjoy your vacation hispet. We're all awaiting anxiously (1000x) but the wait is always worth it...so do it at your own pace if it makes the chapters as effing amazing as these!

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by KittenCuddler05/12/13

Wow....just..wow!!!

This chapter was well worth the agonizing wait ;) It had me running the gamut of my emotions! I was squealing one moment, gasping the next, and fanning myself after that (kara and ben....woohoo that was so erotic!). Just incredible!

I completely agree with other comments that Ben's character grew leaps and bounds in this chapter. I always saw him as secondary to Arlington but now he is definitely a contender in my eyes. I'm still a worshipping Arlingtonite lol but Ben has rose so far in my stock now. And I can't wait to see a showdown between those two. I no longer think Arlington will wipe the floor with Ben anymore!

Chapter 22,more so than any other chapter previously, showed me how amazingly you craft this story. It was like seeing a chess match in my mind. Each character a pawn or knight or bishop moving in a certain way and direction, impacting the board with each movement. The pieces have moved in this chapter; now the game is set and I am just gasping in anticipation for the interaction between the queen and king when they meet face to face. It's going to be explosive and I hope the queen captures the king, lol *wink wink*.

You really are an incredibly gifted writer. I know it's been said before but I would pay to read what you write. So often the story is transparent, and as a reader I can see the ending and everything before it like a set mathematical formula. But this, wow I couldn't have ever predicted the plays you made here! Congratulations, you have me bated and with you till the end! I'll wait as long as it takes to see this through. Enjoy your vacation, you deserve it for supplying all us readers with this story.

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by madasa12305/12/13

Holy hell

That was insanely hot! And showing Kara that it's not Arlington but rather the domination that turns her on. Fabulous chapter, thank you for sharing this with us!

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Arlington fan still

Of course Arlington is not a "true Dom". He's a man with unimaginable wealth and power and does not need to play silly sex games. His power is for real. He takes what he wants because he can. Now, (hopefully HisPet agrees with me) that the object is to get Arlington to realize he needs something more than what he can just "take" and that is love. Although, as I have said before, I'd settle for an interesting Arlington/Alice endgame if it can be written realistically, cuz I really like that girl.

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by Losian05/12/13

as always extremely well written. can't wait how it's going to continue. Hopefully Arlington will get his way.
Besides that I'd be really interested what happened to Elandra during all this time. Black colored eyes, reduced to being the "She-slave". I mean what else could possibly happen any more...

Keep up your amazing work! Hopefully the next chapter won't bring you that much trouble as this one seemingly did :)

Oh btw. is there a possibility to redo the rating? F**king laptop mousepad...

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by Evilpandaqueen05/12/13

I support a Ben and Kara relationship

Arlington just doesn't have enough redeemable qualities. And here's another reason that relationship couldn't work: Kara is legally a slave in Arlington's empire. She could never legally be his wife there. She's wanted for getting Taimus out, the escape, and oh yeah her little demolitions display. Practically and feasibly there is no way. He would have to give up his power and wealth and move to Nardia,and a man like Arlington couldn't give up his perfect life. Not as hard as he worried and fought for it. Even he doesn't have the power to pardon a known criminal on that grand of a stage. Ben on the other hand I believe would do so in a heart beat if he believed it was what was best for Kara. Besides, I really don't think lord Douchebag could ever really make it up to Kara. He treated her so badly, she will always see him as a demon. But even demons can be beautiful. I'm not saying he's not hot, but looks leave little substance. Also look how he tricked Alice into a life time of slavery. He wanted to own her, and knew she would believe she was going to lose her appeal. That's not a nice man, even if he does pay for her mother. It's all about control. That's what attracted him to Kara. He wants to possess, not love. He's too full of himself for that.

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by Evilpandaqueen05/12/13

Not trying to tell you how to write HisPet, just conversing. We all like different characters best lol. I am curious though Arlington supporters: why do you think Kara should end up with Arlington? Friendly conversation and I am actually curious. :)

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by rainshine1905/12/13

to evilpandaqueen

I am an Arlington fan because of his dark side.. In a perfect world, I would say hell yes to Ben and Kara. It is building into a somewhat healthy relationship under some pressures. However, the setting is during a war between a nation trying to conquer those around it. Kara is not meant to be a sex slave yet. Her purpose is to be a conquest slave. Arlington is proving his power and leadership to his nation through the breaking of Kara. So although Kara is having a grand time with Ben, Arlington is more powerful than Ben and will capture Kara once more. I think Ben having sex will Kara just means he'll infuriate Arlington and it'll lead to Ben's death.

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by kakistocracy05/12/13

The wait was agonizing and I refreshed an embarrassing amount of times - but it was very much worth it. I love your characterizations, and the patience you have to define even your side characters: that's what makes this a good story and not only good erotica. I feel like you really ramped up your imagery too in this chapter. You've believably communicated the flavor of a place, so that I really do believe they're in lovely, rural, bucolic Nardia.

I like how Ben was here, but the development was (to me) somewhat contrived, especially compared to how he behaved in some other chapters. I don't blame you for that because he's gone through many iterations as you've received feedback. Nothing a little editing, for consistency, wouldn't fix!

I'm of course still entirely an Arlington fan. To answer someone's earlier question, it's not so much to do with realistic compatibility. In the real world, of course Ben is safer and healthier, and objectively a better choice. The types of crimes Arlington's perpetuated doesn't really make him a viable candidate. BUT as this is a story, Arlington's embodiment of ruthlessness and manipulation and cruelty fulfills all of my personal fantasies.

Oh, and I loved the Elandra revelation as well. That's delicious.

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by Anonymous05/12/13

We now need 6 stars.

Great Mother's Day treat. Arlington needs to learn why he doesn't deserve Kara.

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by KinkyKanizta05/12/13

Just a thought,

I don't understand why a bunch of commenters are always asking for the sappy ending. This is the nonconsent/reluctance category. This isn't romance. Kara should end up with Arlington because that's what this category would want. I'd hate to see this story have a Nicholas Spark's ending.

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by Evilpandaqueen05/12/13

I personally like non cons with a happy ending. It starts out awful but either she rescues herself or falls in love and gets away, those are the ones I like . Loads of non.con.stories on this site like The Captive for instance, start out rough and end well for the heroine. Also Being the Maid ( I think that's Goldenangel's not sure right now) that's what I like, but now and again I'll read something darker. I guess It's a preference thing

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Yuck

Well this as I have feared, its now a romance about Ben and Kara. Loved the story and writing. I won't be reading any further and pretend chapter 20 was the last.

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by shyholly05/12/13

Wow!! That was definitely worth the wait - love the twist with Ben turning aggressive!! I didn't expect that at all from him, but with her so conflicted about fantasizing about Arlington I can understand what he's trying to do. It's a brilliant way to have her channel her sexual needs without going crazy.

I have really enjoyed this story and part of why it's so good is that SHE GOT AWAY from Arlington!! I can't imagine her being tied to him in the end!!! All the things we love about Kara would be lost forever if she were truly broken! I would be more disappointed in this story if her character was built up only to be destroyed in the end. Ben needed to transition and gain a little depth which he certainly did in this chapter. There needs to be healthy balance of nonconsent/reluctance and perseverance to make these stories truly work and to lose hope is to lose interest.

Wonderful job HisPet21!! I'll continue to sit on the edge of my seat waiting for further chapters from you :)

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by LadyParts05/12/13

Good chapter!

Thanks for getting this new chapter posted! I enjoyed it!

I'm having trouble with Carrington's character. I guess because his encounters with Kara up till the end here were kind of passive, he seemed rather penciled in. Maybe it's just that Arlington is so fully revealed, that comparing what we know of Arlington to Carrington... he seems, ...I can't think of the right word... Like he's penciled in...? For instance he's a general and he's a fighter, and he's been taking a passive role in his romance with Kara, bidding his time...then wham he's out of his element with a feisty female.

I'm gonna read this chapter again and see if I missed something...

I did want to say that there were a few scenes here that left me wondering why they were so fully developed, especially in the beginning. As I was reading them I wondered why you were spending so much time playing poker and the drinking, waking up... It felt like you were writing and writing trying to get some where but the points made in those scenes could have been done with much less detail. Unless there was something from those scenes that plays a role later on. But that hasn't really been your style thus far.

Kara getting captured was a bit of a shock. I thought the set up for being recaptured was for the big meeting, that they were being handed back as part of an agreement to lessen hostility, and that's why they were wanted at the summit. So when she was captured I was thrown off. But it was a good throw!

back to Ben's character...I think his rescue would have been better, and perhaps his character might have come through stronger, had you spent some time with Ben as he searched and grew more frantic. Maybe had Ben listening in to the conversation Kara had with Arlington... His blood would be boiling from anger, fear and hatred and that would have made for some seriously passionate domination! Not to mention some spanking for Kara being so stubborn and foolish.

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Yes!!!

This was incredible as always. I knew Ben had a dominant side to him!!! In Chapter 20 when he thought "God, he wanted her....And dammit all, he would have her..." I knew he had it in him to give Kara what she clearly needs, without being sadistic about it. LOVED him spanking her into cathartic submission. That was incredibly hot! Can't wait to see him rubbing it in Arlington's face at the meeting. It's been eating Arlington up since he saw "his girl" following Ben's orders without hesitation in the last chapter. And it was perfect that Ben called her "his girl" to Arlington on the phone and then hung up on him!!! LOL. Arlington will be fuming. Now I'm just dying to see them all together as equals at the meeting. I'm sure you will make that scene one to remember.

I am still completed torn about who I want her to end up with in the end though. I really love them both, especially with Ben showing his own dominant side. And there is still something about Arlington...if he can learn to tone it down a bit. I'm just going to trust in you Hispet. You haven't let me down yet. 5 stars as usual. :-)

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by Anonymous05/12/13

Loveeeeeed

Just WOW! The scene with Kara and Ben was hotttt! Personally, I love them together they're both such badasses! For those who complain that its a noncon/reluctance section, well this still has all of those apects, theres no reason kara cant have her happy Ending too. Don't get me wrong, I love Arlington, but he just doesn't deserve Kara and I can't see his character changing enough in order for it to be believable. I am anxiously waiting arlingtons reaction to the tape it'll be delish, and not too mention his reaction when Kara is his host! What a slap in the face which he rightfully deserves! I can not wait!

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by pheobecharmed05/12/13

anonymous just because theres one hot love scene between ben and kara doesn't mean you should write the story off i mean hispet still have alot of writing left. we don't know how it will turn out. i wouldn't abandon her yet she probably still has tons up her sleeve

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by lisaisalefty05/12/13

Holy blown away, batman!

First off, I must say I am impressed that we got SIX pages! That was fantastic. The build up to Kara's recapture and re-rescue was kind of quick, but I'm glad she didn't go back to Arlington that way. Honestly, once the whole "hosting" scenario was explained, I quickly jumped on that idea fully. It will be fan-freaking-tastic to see Kara being the one to meet and greet Arlington and play happy hostess while he is in negotiations. What a reverse mindfuck that one's going to be for him! He needs that dose of his own medicine.

There are some detractors stating they don't like the HEA or even the love story between Kara and Ben or even Kara and Arlington, but I have to agree with Evilpandaqueen about the fact that there are plenty of noncon/reluctance stories that have them. Just because there is reluctance or even dubious consent does not always have some formula for failure. However, I disagree with Evilpandaqueen that the possibility of Arlington and Kara working out is not plausible. I feel like this story is far from over and that we have perhaps an entire second part (or would that be third part at this point?) that we have yet to see. Yeah, Ben's dominant side is finally being brought to light. It's great that Kara can recognize her submissive side in an environment that is more traditional BDSM (safe, sane, consensual), BUT that doesn't discount Arlington from the Kara aspect.

It seems there are at least several avenues these characters could take. Ben and Kara could go the distance, especially by going down their current path. Arlington and Kara could end up back together. She could end up back with him by force in Isleydore and she is once again his slave/pet, but that would involve so much destruction of Kara's spirit, it would almost make the entire story pointless. However, what about the possibility of Arlington abandoning his side? The fallout from that scenario could easily make for a part 3 in this tale. Of course, I couldn't even begin to say how that would occur. I'm certainly no writer (despite my current best efforts to pretend I am!). He is a Dom, without a doubt. He might not be the Dom of dreams, but he is certainly dominant/alpha male. We do not know enough about his background yet to understand him fully. There are too many unknowns, but he would be the alpha in any relationship. It's the grand canyon between where his head currently is and where Kara's is that's their biggest obstacle.

Even with this wonderfully long chapter, I feel like there is no guarantee who Kara will end up with, if she even ends up with either men or with anyone at all. There is too much story left to tell. I am eagerly looking forward to reading more of it! Well done, Hispet21, once again. I'd give you more stars if I could.

-Lisa

ps. sorry this was so freaking long! :/

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by Anonymous05/12/13

loved it

it was well worth the wait...... Can't wait for chapter 23.....great job...

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by Anonymous05/13/13

Its probably just me, given I'm more into the reluctance side of things or nonconsent slowly turned consent, but my heart would break if kara didn't end up with someone she truely wanted,not saying that has to be ben just saying that as a reader I've become attached to ben and kara and it'll take a lot of creative writing to get me on arlingtons side, but so far love the direction you're going!!!!!!!!!!

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by Anonymous05/13/13

hot scene

i'm starting to like ben more, but he still can't compare to arlington for me. i don't want kara to end up with ben.

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by Anonymous05/13/13

Arlington/Kara

Awesome chapter. Really hope she ends up with Arlington though, I really do not care much for Ben and he seems to be making the story drift away from non-consent/reluctance.

Also, thank you so much for including that bit about Elandra. I've been waiting to hear more about her story since the first few chapters. Overall, excellent.

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by tati8905/13/13

details upon reread and an essay

Upon reread, I caught up on a few details. Who is this private investor that would be interested in this tape? It cant be anyone from the Nardia's government since it makes no sense. Who did arlington develop a "hero complex" with.... wanting to save a woman and being macho man. It cant be Alice. Arilyn? Thanks for giving us answers on elandra and why alyssa was rescued but then now we have more riddles..haha.

I know many readers think that it would be cliche if kara ends up with ben and have a happily ever after. Yes that would be a bit cliche since we like nonconsent for the unconventional/twisted love. However, it would also be very cliche of kara to end up with A. since it's been done so many times where brave girl falls in love with captor and live happily ever after (stockholm dick syndrome I call it). Either way would be seen as typical/cliche/wtf by different viewers..You cant win em all...so just do it how you want to hispet.

A reader asked why readers like arlington. A lot of reasons really mainly because he hits all of my kinks. He's devishly handsome, confident, and mysterious. A real 3 dimensional antagonist. He's an accomplished self made wealthy man (not an unemployed teenage bad boy type..arlington is a real bad man), a manipulating interrogator, a powerful politician, a kickass ex assasin, a commanding military man...are there anything that arlington cant do? and most of all because he has power and isnt afraid to use it. Power is heady and sexy. This is why kara cant help being attracted to him imo. Is he right for Kara? Maybe...I still have a hard time time not being disgusted by his actions towards her and wanting kara to break free forever. Only time will tell but I still do absolutely LOVE arlington's character. He's so damn interesting...I LOVE ben as well now and how he makes her smile instead of having a psychotic breakdown in a forsaken jailcell where she cried herself to sleep. My heart breaks for her...ultimately, I want whats best for kara because she's my homegirl. She's by far the character who deserves happiness most since she was dragged into this war and suffered greatly because of one man's obsession with her.

My post are just too darn long..someone stop me. :p

Ps: Poor elandra.. :(

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by evonna05/13/13

OH. MY. GOD.

I’m a puddle on the floor, Hispet. A puddle on the floor. What a ride.
Where is that button for 6 stars?

How many boxes of what is the hottest hot and coolest cool can you possibly tick with one chapter? Erm, only fifty or so! Jesus.. where to start..? Ok, here’s my rant:

Ben
I love the way you flesh out Ben and gradually bring forth his assertiveness and natural dominance in this chapter. It starts out fairly politely at the tavern, and then gets cleverly and gradually amped up until reaching the pure and absolute steaminess of the last page or two.

It’s quite a feat for you to turn our collective opinion of Ben around so decidedly and swiftly. I think many of us were a little bored of his niceness, and although were allowed a few glimpses of his natural dominance, tended to write him off as a bit of a softie when it came to Kara. But of course it was all there staring us in the face the whole time. The guy is a General and leader of a rebel alliance, for Christ’s sake, he’s bound to be naturally dominant! He just knows to ‘harass’ the lady into saying yes first, and then it’s all out. And boy, did it come out.

The sex
Amazing. I hate it when you read stories in this section, and the bloody foreplay with all the tit-and-clit-and-pussy-twisting-and-sucking-and-li cking-and-fingering (forgive my French) takes two whole pages, and even the about-to-be-ravished heroine is getting a little bored. No danger of that here! I love it that the pants were off in a whiff, he was on his knees in a second, and the moment she was wet, he was inside her. *sigh* Super. Hot. And Urgent and Rough, and all the good stuff. All of it.
I was afraid Kara might think of Arlington, or moan his name or something, but I’m so glad you didn’t do this, it’s so much better this way, for her to just think of Ben in that moment. Let Arlington have his work cut out for him, let him work for it, without her being putty in his hands from the get-go. So much more interesting and erotic like this, with Kara being stronger than that.
See, you’ve made me think about a threesome now. If only Arlington and Ben could put aside their differences and egos for a moment, they could double-team her (is that the word? first time I feel the need to use that).. maybe with some Anterline and absinthe combo someone could make them drink.. :) Hmm, unlikely, admittedly.

Kara fessing up to Ben
How incredibly hot was it that Ben didn’t untie her? And demanded she talk. I loved it that Kara was so honest and blunt and angry about it all, no attempt to prettify what happened or what she felt, for Ben’s benefit, but just the opposite, in fact. That was very nicely done.
And I was quite surprised she had worked it through in her head that she was dreaming about sex with Arlington because of the domination, not because of Arlington. (sounds like it’s partly a defense mechanism, you did suggest in an earlier chap that she was starting to come to terms with being attracted to A. etc.). And surprised that Ben just bought it, but of course he would WANT to believe it isn’t Arlington she wants. And he did test the theory :) so it was at least partly true.
As well as being hot as hell, I see this scene as a sort of useful therapy session for Kara, with Ben again telling her that it’s ok to be feeling like this, and wanting this. Him giving her the acceptance making her stronger and more at ease with her urges, sexuality/ sexual power. Not that Ben is only a sex therapist to me, you’ve certainly made him a VERY valid and hot rival for Arlington, which I will forever love you for.

Arlington
Ooooh, the moment he smashed Avery’s nose to pieces was *evil*, I flinched a little, but of course this is classic Arlington, he would do just that.

When Arlington said the first hot as fuck words to Kara over the phone after such a long time, violins were playing in my head. The sun was shining, and all was good and right in the world :). Just made me realise how much I’d missed these two interacting, or just Arlington speaking to her, it is so INSANELY erotic! And loved the veiled anger. God, I’ll be reading that paragraph quite a few times :).

I love the way you’ve managed to cook up a scenario where Arlington and Kara will be forced to meet on somewhat equal ground. Can’t wait for the sparks to fly, and for whatever games or seduction Arlington is going to pull out of his sleeve (/pants). And whether they will have to talk a little. Like two human beings. And CAN’T WAIT for Ben to show his domination / “ownership” / proof of his access to Kara’s body in front of Arlington. Ohh, Hispet, it’s all so much better than I thought it could ever be! I can see Ben is gaining some fans here, but I’m still fully in Team Arlington.

Him listening to the tape will be yummy, and I can see him easily getting pretty damn hard and getting off to hearing Kara moaning and describing the sex (someone said he would only be amused), I think listening to the person you most want to fuck in this world screaming your name would do that to you, even if you’re Arlington :).

Kara’s capture
This was a surprise, didn’t see it coming, which was great! I was thinking something may happen at the negotiations, and didn’t expect her to be caught with so little preamble, as I was still all caught up with her fight with Ben. Very nicely done. And there I was thinking: Oh no, Ben didn’t get to do her before she gets back to Arlington now, but of course you went on to fix that :) (in a breath-taking way)!
I also like the way you pointed out, in the words of Charlotte’s men, that there were too many military personnel around the group usually, and that they could only snatch Kara when she was alone. As I was getting a little uneasy about it being too easy for Arlington to grab Kara during the negotiations, but perhaps it won’t be quite that simple, which is great.

The cock-fight on the phone
How amazing are you to write in something like this? It was brilliant. Is there anything hotter than two hot guys.. NO: men like Arlington and Ben specifically, fighting over you like this? *deep breath*
And of course: Oh no, he didn’t! Oh yes, he did! Ben having the NERVE to call her *his girl* on the phone to Arlington. Awesomeness to the power of ten! How did he know? How did he know to push exactly the right button?!! LOL Loved it.
Oh, and: Ben hanging up on Arlington, mid-sentence! Just when he was about to crescendo his little monologue into something poignant and evil! I didn’t see that coming, and it was brilliant. And he did it with such good humour and casual, playful disrespect. He just earned his way into Kara’s pants in my mind with that one, big time. (Oh, and the rescue was nice of him as well, of course :).
Arlington did show he’s a cool cat to boot with that amused, confident little chuckle on the phone when he first heard Ben’s voice. Oh, if he only knew what was about to go down! :)

It’s all just too good.
Can’t wait for the next one!

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by pheobecharmed05/13/13

Love reading them

i love reading long comments it passes the time between chapters :-)

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by averylee1905/13/13

Just yes. Perfect turnaround from Ben in my opinion, that was a great scene. I'm glad she didn't actually get caught now because I'm looking forward to the negotiations.

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