All Comments on 'Baby's Run Ch. 01'

You're a good writer and this much is clear in this story, but this is not your best. No sexual tension. Baby's response to seeing the naked man is difficult to understand. Why would she be turned on immediately? And why is he jerking off so furiously? We have no insights into his motivations but no real desire to try to find out.

As soon as I read dark bush it instantly became a favorite. Well done Naked1.