by case28
I'm not sure of the reason, reread the first three stanzas, and then jump to
Release the hounds!
Let those babies out,
Reveal their splendorous bounce.
wtf! in poetry less is more, all in all very interesting, but i fell a little more care in selection of what to include and what to exclude would go a long way.
5ed
I liked it, the "release the hounds" made me chuckle as I sometimes refer to breasts as puppies. My issue is a small simple one, of where it should be off. Other than that I thought it was good. I wish I could say what kept it from being more than just good but I'm afraid I got nuttin'.
..gemacht. selbst die tolle abweichung bei 5.05 im audio ist sehr subtil. hoffen wir mals das beste fuer den armen Rudolph