All Comments on 'Fledgling Slave Ch. 02'

Perhaps you could warn for breath play before? Forgot to check tags and that was an intense example.

Thanks for reading, Anonymous, I appreciate you stopping by.

I don't feel a *warning* sticker is necessary since it's in the BDSM category of erotica writing. As you can understand, BDSM culture can get a bit ... kinky! :)

Warm regards

JD

This is awesomely written, and I'm a fan of breathplay, but that last happening was SO intense! A small warning might have been nice, or even an adjustment to make it slightly more...sexual. For example, if one of the guards had been inside of One when applying the bag.... I just thought they were actually killing him and was just upset at losing a character that I really liked! The breathplay between One and Slave was AWESOME. But maybe this is all just personal preference, since I like to at least know that the breathplay is PLAY, and not turning into, you know, murder. I was worried that One's punishment for figuring out the Master's "weakness" was to be killed =(

That was not breathplay, is was damn near snuff. You framed it as punishment, serious punishment, nothing playful. You intended us to think the character was about to die. Poorly done of you. Even within the environs of bdms, I find this world of yours unpleasant and not erotic.