All Comments on 'New Territory'

by SlyAngel

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
AMAZING!!!

Please keep this story going it sounds like its going to be wonderful :) YDKM

angelicbeautyangelicbeautyalmost 11 years ago

Great beginning g. Please make ur chapters a bit longer though. I love how you started this. Very good

goatman92goatman92almost 11 years ago
Why?

Why must authors always end their stories with this.. I can't even call this a cliffhanger because we already know what's going to happen. Please finish this one.

jpz007ahrenjpz007ahrenalmost 11 years ago
Title of your comment:

Good first story. I'd offer encouragement or criticism if I thought it would help. But, you seem to have the intro down. Don't feel too pressured to put cheap sex in every story. From what I've seen, most of the best stories on this site are actual stories.

Just take a deep breath, hold still for a moment, and do what you want to do.

RitjodRitjodalmost 11 years ago
Good

Good start left me wanting more

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Try writing this all in present tense.

you go back and forth and it weakens the narrative. Also watch your first transition from her perspective to his. It's jolting. Good start, good luck, keep writing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Please posted the second chapter

HI there have just read this chapter as you cant just leave it there so please posted more even if it just to tell us what happend when she sat down ???

SlyAngelSlyAngelabout 10 years agoAuthor
Ok ok... ;)

So I've been away for awhile, as life can do, but now I'm back. :D I find myself with random bouts of time on my hands so when I got the e-mail from a reader yesterday it reminded me that I had this story here. Well, I have a page written down on paper as of my adding this comment and I will be working on adding at least a few more before typing it up and posting it. Thank you all for your patience.

Sincerely,

SlyAngel

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Come On, SlyAngel!!!!

We've been waiting since February, when you last commented for chapter 2. Six months is a long time to wait. Please hurry. :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Wow!!!!

This story has so much potential. I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter, and want to know what happens next when she sits down next to the wolf, but I can't if you don't post chapter 2. Please I'm dying here, the suspense is killing me. ;) Please update. :)

MickeyKMickeyKover 3 years ago

PLEASE POST what happened next!!! Such a GREAT start!!!

P1aydat3P1aydat3about 2 years ago

Please continue!!!

StrixalucoStrixalucoalmost 2 years ago

Really wish you'd have time to continue this. It doesn't necessarily have to be dozens of chapters long with all possible kinds of turns in the plot - we just want to know how they get together!

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