All Comments on 'Ryan'

Good start.

Great start! Good build-up, likable characters, and some initial sparks. Can't wait for Chapter 2. :)

5 Stars.

Promising first effort. Very promising.

Five.

I like it. I love reading first time submissions. And you have a great start with this chapter. Can't wait for the next update! ツ

Nice start.

loving where this is going

Ryan is hot, you just made want to drive over to the nearest Lowe's in search if my very own Ryan!

I like the story very much so far and look forward to reading more. Please update soon. Good start!

Now you must finish.Great start, great writing. Looking forward to more. Love music references too.

I like Ryan! mmmmmm so hottt! :3

Well done on your first submission.

Loving both chararcters already and you have left me gagging for more.

5* bring on the next chapter!!!

NWLondonGirl

Thanks for your support and comments. The next chapter has been submitted. Should be just a few days before it's posted. Thanks again. :-)

I'm loving what you have written so far.

Looking forward to more...

Great story in the making here...this is a good start...and chapters should flow quickly......please!

Love the start can't wait for more;)

I demand more!!! Lol I'm really feeling this story already!!! Definitely post more!

Always got time for a fine ass man!

Your writing style and story telling are amazing! However, I HATE virgin stories. The girls become cliché as well as the stories. But I'm gonna stick it out to see what you have in store.

I like most romance themed stories... I like how your developing the characters. To Anon about Virgin Stories... As far as virgin stories go, I like them too as well as the non-virgin tales. I was a virgin in my late twenties when I met my first boyfriend who was the same age as me, he was in the Marine Corp., another friend was a 34 yr. old virgin, so... go figure. I was a size 8 then and people then and now claim I look like Nia Long. So these stories starring late bloomers are very possible. I like the innocence for 1, and for 2, they (virgins) are still out there and they make cute stories. But anyhume, I like your story build up.

I was immediately pulled into this storyline and settling in for what appears is going to be a very good storyline.

I love this story, and I only just began.

I thought the expression is 'to put the cart before the horse' and not the other way round...correct me if am wrong please.

Great story tho😊

Yes, it gone way wrong. Took a wrong turn off the highway and went into a ditch. Through this process I've learned just how hard it is to write, especially with no formal training. To point, sometimes you look at something so long until your mind sees what it wants to see. I've had that happen on more than a few occasions. I've considered getting an editor involved, but that still takes a lot of time as I can't just send it to one unedited, lol. Anyway, the upshot is that there are errors that I just don't catch, not for lack of trying though. Sometimes it's just simply that I've gone blind from reading and re-reading, I'm too tired or I just don't have the time. The time factor is a reason I haven't posted the 2 stories that are essentially finished; they need more editing. Agggghhhhh! That's my frustration lol. Thanks for your comment. BTW I've edited this story since posting it and STILL did not find that error. SMH.

whoa that was fast o.o...

Great start to a nice story and I'm sure it's gonna get better. What I like most is your response to a comment....shows you have a great deal of maturity and do consider the readers' constructive feedback.....you will only get better and all my best wishes in your journey putting words to an idea and spinning a great tale

Thank YOU!!

Thanks for taking the time to comment. I really enjoy feedback from the readers, even those pointing out my errors. Writing is hard work and since it's a hobby, rather than a career, I don't have a big chunk of time to devote to it on a regular basis. However, comments help me to improve and hopefully keeps me from making the same mistakes. It's also nice to know that they care enough to drop me a line or two.

Liking this book so far

Good start.

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