by writerchap
Don't know where the author was educated but must have failed. All the "..." and "--" proves the point of failure in grammar and proper usage. Then the use of local isms loses many of the international readers who don't know nor understand what is meant by "wanking", and "spunk" (which is a behavior type not a slang for semen). This kind of bad story should be pulled from the site.
A good start if a little short, I will be interested to see where this story goes.
By the way, ignore idiots like Anon - 'Don't know' .......'wanking' and 'spunk' are well know UK slang words for masturbating and sperm. Just because Anon is too ignorant to know, doesn't mean the more intelligent readers will feel the same.
Keep going.
Sense it is on a farm can you work in rob watching his aunt soaping up in an outdoor shower and later on her asking him to join her to get clean that could be hot and I like the story so far keep up the good work
This is off to a good start. I like the British tone and the tight prose. Thanks.
You've got the makings of an interesting story here. There are tons of 'well written' stories on this site that are boring as hell, and no amount of editing can change that. However if you are looking for a story that incites interest, the pickings are sometimes pretty lean. You can always find an editor to help with the grammar later...
Nice start, would be interested to see how the summer progresses.
It seems as if the story has some truth to it, but wrapped around some creative fiction.
I hope that he can learn how to please a mature woman from his aunt, and become a very good lover to her.
There's always plenty to do around a farm all season long, and perhaps he will enjoy the countryside lifestyle enough to want to stay,especially if he has his aunt's pussy to keep him busy.
Thanks for the read.
Interesting story, but its too short and other than a wet dream there is no sex. In my opinion a story should be around 2-3 pages in length with at least one actual sexual encounter. If you can get to the sex in one page so be it. This story starts getting you excited and then ends before I can even get a full erection.
You have a great start going and a multitude of possibilities going for you. I'm anxious read more
Just a quick note to say thanks to everyone for the feedback -- glad to find it seems to have gone down well! Chapter 2 will be on its way in a little while...
You really need to finish this story. I cannot wait to see what happens next.