by dragonwriter
The premise was NICE! Your writing skills needs a lot of work. You are redundant in many areas, and the story lags in many areas. For a first work, not too bad.
time is the imperfections, and raw emotion. Who ever said things correctly? Only later do most of us find security with practice and polish skills, yet there is also that innocence lost. Thank you for a very sweet story!
great story I enjoyed it very much and would like to hear more about them.
I laughed when I read about his 'first time' fucking. It was a Polish lady. My first time was with an old hooker. I believe she was eastern European and although it was over 60 years ago I still recall her instructing me on how to fuck her. Her instructions were about what I just read. I was a teen and very inexperienced but I had stamina and I fucked her as long as I could.