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By the Beach

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by Anonymous

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by mammoet07/04/13

great story

could use more chapters

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Needs a little more buildup

Personally, I'd prefer a little more build up.

By the way, I think you meant "epilogue," not "prologue."

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by mojorisin196707/04/13

Nice story!

We are keen reading more about Lisbeth.

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by Rhomanov07/04/13

Good start

Became a tad shallow by the halfway mark.

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by Anonymous07/04/13

It could also use ...

... the help of a good proof-reader and a good Editor.
Far too many silly errors!!

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by redlion7507/05/13

too rushed

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by ReiDeBastos07/05/13

Conventions are so...conventional

I mean, really - Who says that a Prologue has to come BEFORE the story? How passe'!

When you write the next installment (and I hope you will), perhaps you could preface it with an Epilogue!

:D

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by DeweyWoo07/05/13

Excellent story.

Did need one more edit, however. Can't wait for the next installment.

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by chytown12/07/13

Good Read****

Very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.

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