could use more chapters
Personally, I'd prefer a little more build up.
By the way, I think you meant "epilogue," not "prologue."
We are keen reading more about Lisbeth.
Became a tad shallow by the halfway mark.
... the help of a good proof-reader and a good Editor.
Far too many silly errors!!
I mean, really - Who says that a Prologue has to come BEFORE the story? How passe'!
When you write the next installment (and I hope you will), perhaps you could preface it with an Epilogue!
Did need one more edit, however. Can't wait for the next installment.
Very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.
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