by blackzilla99
Having had thoughts of incest about my own sister, fine sister I might add, this story left me wishing and fantasising about my own sister. Only problem is I know it won't happen. Perhaps it is best that it remain a fantasy.
I don't think I would be able to handle it. I love my sister too much, and I want her even more.
Being a white male when I got to the no white boys no white bitches part I didn't care to read anymore of your racist garbage.
Great story, but it must be awfully difficult to write properly with that BLACK CHIP on your shoulder! Get over being black and just live a normal life, you won't be nearly as angry as you are.
Cool story. Don't know and don't care about all that black shit but the story was awsome. Love it.
It was ok. But, gees, the constant "Dang! I's be a black ghetto pimp who be pimping up that sexy big assed sis of mine right diggity" was really tiresome. Then again i am a female. I just happened to find it uninteresting for the most part.
Excellent work. I had no probs with it at all, I completely understand where you comming from on the black stuff (I ain't black but I've lived in a black community). The story was really erotic and very sensual. The way you wrote took me through everything so sweetly that it painted a clear picture in my mind. Gosh I enjoyed it. Just got off to this story.
Excellent work, right down my taste avenue!!!!
I thought this story was hotter than HELL!
Black, White, who gives a damn. HOTTT!!!
im a little black freak and i loved all that shit. i could really connect with it.i dont fantasize about my brother but i do have a fantasy about another girl and guy
Your actual erotic content was great, and the ghetto talk actually worked. The one thing I didn't like was how the ghetto continued on after the talking was done. That makes a story difficult to read, and can get quite annoying. All in all, a decent read.
The best story on this website!!!! It's clear from some of the comments that some people simply will never GET IT! Keep them cumming.....you are amazing!!!!
I had to finish this entire story before I went to bed; It is one of the best MOTHA FUCK'N stories I've read so far.....
Being a black women who loves erotica, i thought that your story was wonderful. There aren't really a lot of stories that use black characters, and im glad that i read your story!!!!!! Keep it up!!!!!
Your story actually helped get something started!!! Thanks MAN!!!!
THIS HAS GOT TO BE ONE BEST STORIES IVE EVER READ. THANKS FOR SHARING THIS WITH ME.
That was HOT! At first it I didn't know where it was going with the racism type writing but I couldn't stop reading and what an erotic story. VERY Nice, lot's of talent, keep them comming.
I really loved this story, kinda reminded me of when I was working in a strip club and my brother use to come in to hangout with me. I dont feel that way about my brother but it use to make the strippers I worked with hot when I would be him a lap dance or two. A couple of grammatical errors, (punction and sentence structure ) but otherwise it was so hot
Loved it unlil the $600 tip was over-the-top
This must have really happened along with your great talent, Damn good writing.
If you cut out the racist crap this would be a hot story. You obviously have talent but then so did Hitler... More love, less hate!
The dialog was fucking awesome! I'm about as white as a redneck country boy can get, but I love the dynamics of the black culture and interactions. It works really well, and was a really hot story.
I think that some of the wording at the very beginning of the story had an unfortunate racist tone (which may have even been unintentional) that did not serve the story well, and was a little uncomfortable to read. I think I get the stage you were trying to set, and I even think I understand the feeling you were trying to get across, but it did play out a bit to harshly. Again, only referring to the very beginning of the story. That's all that kept me from giving five stars. Otherwise I thought it was great!
One other note. I haven't gotten a lap dance, much less a private room dance, for less than $30 In the past ten years, and that was only for one song.
This story had my attention from the beginning to the end, very hard to find a black taboo/incest story anywhere I think I've found a great author for what interest me,keep writing this would be a perfect fick
whatever you do, keep writing blackzilla...not a lot of black incest stories, and that was one of the most erotic ones I ever read...keep up the good work...
I felt like I was in attendance with Dee, staci, and Trina. I came also.
Whew! that story was just like all your writing excellent 5stars!!
Surely incest is incest, and the color of the skins involved shouldn't make a difference? Obviously to you it does, which makes you just as bigoted and racist as some middle-aged, 1960's Georgia cracker. No stars, and get your bigoted ass into the 21st century, your Jim Crow attitudes left a bad smell all over this story.
Deserves & gave five stars!!! I felt the emphasis on blackness was on point & necessary, because non-black erotic stories do the same, putting emphasis on the character being a blonde, brunette, or redhead or having blue or green eyes, silky hair, etc... the word "white" may not have been used, but message received anyway. Besides there's a lack of black erotica & that doing that it makes it easier to find those stories during a search. Rare to come across a black erotic story that pulls you in like this one did, because I felt like I was in that booth with them. Such a great piece!!
(PS: This story is not bigoted at all, just some folks are NOT comfortable hearing the truth. Black people have to work in a white world 5 days or more a week & conform to standards that white people deem acceptable in an effort to make white people comfortable, where as white people do not have to conform to what black people feel is acceptable. This puts a lot of stress in black folks and YES, we sometimes need a break from white people).
You need a editor. Bad grammar and punctuation detracts from the story. Hope you keep going.
This story was amazing! I don't know what that anon was talking about. The story read just fine with or without AN editor. Never trust grammar police if they don't know their own grammar is fucked.
Anyway, great story about black incest (there's so few out there). This really hit close to home and is almost to the T of one of my experiences with a young lady I would role play with. The only differences were we weren't really related, we initiated the flirting between us in front of the stripper (we had already told her we were siblings), and she came home with us that night. Everything else inside the club and private booth was damn near identical.
As a fellow writer I can easily say that we suffer f3om the same grammatical errors on occasion. However, this is one of the best African American stories I've read so far on this site. Hope you continue the good work!