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by mamaval2930

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erectus123erectus123almost 11 years ago
very nice

"Poseidon conquering the waves" adds a classical note but the poem stands well even without that line. the concluding lines are gentle yet very strongly poetic and well done.

todski28todski28almost 11 years ago
No morning breath then?

A jest!

I love this piece, the second of yours that I have enjoyed.

Way better way to wake up than an alarm clock.

In the fifth stanza, is it supposed to read

Heeding his call to fun?

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Conservative and professional by day, vixen by secret. I write both romantic stories, as well as erotica. My goal is to bring pleasure to people with my writing.