All Comments on 'Red Tape'

by wakingDown

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Desejo almost 11 years ago

There is a world of potential in this poem. It's already a 5, but I think it could be even stronger with some changes. I've read your bio an assume this has to do with your own situation. Bring it through here stronger, make it so no one has to wonder what red tape you are talking about. Then publish it. Right now this could be about the post office, or someone trying to get a loan. The first two stanzas are not as hard hitting as they could be.

HarryHill almost 11 years ago

Posting this before I read Desejo;s comment.

By the way, She has an interview in the PFD forum, take a look; ask a question.

Now, 'Red Tape'

Love the headings before each stanza which were an insiders linear progression through a process; it's ending on Filing Error [GO BACK TO TOP] was particularly satisfying.

HarryHill almost 11 years ago

For Desejo, who said,

Right now this could be about the post office, or someone trying to get a loan.

The institutions have been changed to protect their ineptitude; the very definition of Red Tape.

UnderYourSpell almost 11 years ago

Seems like you've been there when I've been trying to fill in my Tax Report! A good strong poem that say it all ........ the frustration and consequences of not getting things right the first time. Thanks for the read