All Comments on 'A Semen Sonnet'

done, lovely title

Whoa. I'm reeling from sensory overload - and the fact that you managed to fit gems like these:

A navel full of candied fairy dung !!!!

Ambrosia salvaged from a dumpster

into a sonnet. Unquestioned 5, smart, unexpected..and gross. In a nice way.

I can tell you from experience, this is gross, as any one on latrine duty in the Middle World can tell you. Try the river lobster instead. Nice Poem.

about the words, what you are doing at the front end is interesting. Now why did you break the rhyme scheme. Also the poem uses heavy end stop rhyme, one enjambement

Like ambrosia scavenged from a dumpster <

out back,

S3 is a pattern like..like..like

S2 the reverse, why?

Suppose you have set up S2 exactly like S3,

like... like... lke...enjamb

just something to consider

5ed