All Comments on 'Naughty Japanese High School Boys'

by nihonhentai

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RpierzRpierzover 10 years ago
Good overall...

...but you should definitely get yourself a proofreader for your next attempt. Some of the verbiage was off as was a couple of the tenses; case in point, in one sentence in the 3rd paragraph from the bottom: Taka told his teaching to stop faking her sleep and kiss him.

It wasn't enough to ruin the overall story for me, but something you should keep in mind for your next one.

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