by darkmaas
Here. I read a lot of your work since seeing your interview in the forum, your style is awesome. Inly thing I didn't like was the line
she grunts
there again just about everything else has been done ad-nauseum worthy of a five from me.
I agree with todski - not sure about the grunt. She sighs? She gasps? Maybe not the effect you were looking for. Also not sure if you need shoulders in the second line, it's implied. Still an excellent write and an interesting situation.
disheveled vulture
cool plaster
cool and unusual sonic combo
molten folds of flesh engorged.
here too
even if I'm not a fan of people grunting during sexual ecstasy - they may do it, but still.
+5 for the images though - I'll never look at a brocade couch the same way again.