All Comments on 'Hard Day'

read this back to yourself, excited? intent to follow the seduction? no vote up or down. keep writing

nice lines, a little to long but worth the read to get to last lines

I ran out of breathe halfway through due to no punctuation, which also made me skip to the end. I'm sure there is some good stuff here but it's very tiring when my brain tries to put in the punctuation for me.

Fuck me. You seem experienced enough : P