All Comments on 'Meditation On a Lighthouse'

by kitten1964

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twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years ago
given

the constriction of the exercise, you did rather well, what did the workshop say and teach you about the purpose of this?

given a 5, in the hopes this isn't a trend

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureover 10 years ago
Interesting

....but a little disconected. I think using the Fibonacci Numbers Sequence in poetry is very challenging. Well done for tackling it. There might be a PFDF challenge there.

UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellover 10 years ago
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Poetry and Mathematics ........ all the ones I've seen make interesting patterns on the page which this doesn't, but still well done for attempting something different

HarryHillHarryHillover 10 years ago
For kitten: beautiful work carrying the theme to the end. I just wish the last word in

the sequence was red.

For Twelve: you missed the hidden iambic pentameter

For Tristesse: not funny!

For USP: there is a pattern; it's just hard to see, and thank you for recommending it.

twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years ago
for hh

you miss the definition of iambic pentameter, 5 feet, unstressed, stressed, in a line

and other than that I don't care

HarryHillHarryHillover 10 years ago
for twelve

do you think I really go around counting iambs anymore? gotcha.

kitten I also liked your post in the 5 senses challenge, though I said nothing very clean. give us another

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