All Comments on 'One Summer'

by Remec

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AngelineAngelineover 10 years ago
You really are a good storyteller

and your images just kill. This:

"Lovely as the

garden, with skin that could compare

to the silkiest of petals and kisses

that seemed to drip Neapolitan along

my tongue, while her hair always

seemed awash in citronella."

is gorgeous. You took me there. Nice work.

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureover 10 years ago
I'm always last.

Being on the outer edge of the continent means I'm often last to the table but this poem is worth savouring. "Squared greenery" conjures up all those stately manicured gardens so aptly. As Ange has said your imagery is wonderful, from the garden at night to the rude intrusion of choppers on an unknown mission.

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