All Comments on 'Raw'

with the meat and sushi references underscoring the erotica. Great read. Thank you.

I'm going to recommend your poem on Lit's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum, here:

http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=904458

I was not inclined to leave one, probably on first sight alone.

I like it raw

and short lines and excess of hyphens and the end looks like a disaster. However it does have it's moments

see that is the cool thing about comments, sometimes you get one that disagrees

don't worry score didn't suffer

hesitant 5

Thank you very much for your feedback and comments.

Gewurz-tram-in-er is a German wine that I never cared for but it works so well! All the marbles.

Yipes! Vegans be warned! I think this stretches the limits of metaphor but that is part of the intent.? Healing her butcher/with cleaver blow? I like the alternative word usage. I like how you have done your line breaks - it would be a very different poem if they were done differently. Certainly appropriately titled in any case...high marks for creativity.

Thank you so much for your great feedback, I'm actually pleasantly surprised by the response.