All Comments on 'Intruder'

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twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years ago
S1

very, very good, you know the reasons. Sustain, i.e. start breaking out of workshop mode. Small example "hellish" ish is generally a diminishing suffix, also a bit overused. Let's leave it as S1 very, very good, 5ed

DesejoDesejoover 10 years ago

This one confuses me. I don't understand the jagged tooth metaphor, and more importantly I don't think the oppressor is as obvious as you may intend. I think it could be fixed with some word changes - but I cannot say, because I don't know what you intended.

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