All Comments on 'A Concerted Effort'

Nice pace, nice actual "story" to go along with the tale as well. I really enjoy reading a story that doesn't forget the "Lit" part of "Literotica". Excellent job.

This story is well-written and very erotic. I'd like to see one more chapter to see what might happen among these four. There are many possibilities, any of which could work. I'd love to know where the author would take this.

Its begging for a sequel or more! I agree with the last comments as its putting the literature back in!

A very nice build up, with lots of options in the future (Bella, Amanda with Holly or on her own).

Thank you.

Very well done.

Very well written and very erotic. I'd like to see a couple of following stories with Amanda & Holly, then with Cassie and maybe even another involving Bella an some sisters.

I gave it a five because of the sisters narrative. I thought you fleshed out their differing personalities very well, especially Cassie's. For once in one of these offerings here at Lit, you made me like the person. Also, I really enjoyed Bella's character, in particular her unabashed vulnerability.

I have to say, though, that with the way you revealed Cassie's delightfully open candor Bella really had no reason to be so concerned on Ty's behalf. Cassie meant no one any harm. She's just smart, caring, honest and sexy. Nothing wrong with that.

The irony is that I did have a bit of a problem with how you painted the main character. I admit it, by the middle of the story I was becoming seriously fed up with Ty's incessant "party pooping," as Cassie correctly referred to it. It simply didn't fit in the context of the story. He was behaving more like their disapproving father rather than as their extremely fortunate ex-brother-in-law. At a certain point (much sooner than it happened in the story), he needed either to shit or get off the pot. It was frustrating as hell, seeing him constantly reproaching them for every fun, flirty thing they wanted to do.

I still loved the story anyway, though. Cassie and Bella more than made up for Ty. You did a great job with those two characters.

I found a great deal of enjoyment in your story. It read well and told a whole story while leaving the door open for additional chapters, but they are not needed. This story can easily be left as is. Five stars and I favorited both the story and you as the author.

Thank you.

I can almost taste Cassie, even now.

The story was great. In most stories, the climax outdoes everything else, but the lead in here was spectacular. Well done...

I really hope there are more chapters to come. I love is story

My goodness! What a great story!! As I read I had the whole story going though my minds eye. Every encounter went through my mind like I was watching it all on a screen or even right there being a voyeur. VERY VERY GOOOD!!!

This was great, it needs an epilogue or sequel. Great Jimmet Buffet tie in. 55X⭐️

For some crazy reason this darn system refuses to acknowledge my vote of a full set of 5 stars.

My jealousy is split between Ty and Orie for different reasons.

and a good time was had by all.

well written.

Never added a comment, never felt the need until I read this. Damn good story!

I could have done without the pee ing part, but it was a reasonable part of the build-up. Good character development, and a plausible backstory. And by the time they got down to it, I was at least as ready as Tyler.

Nicely done. A strong product from start to finish. I greatly appreciate the accurate grammar, spelling, and punctuation; even a great story can be spoiled if my brain keeps getting jarred by bad use of the language.

Great writing, plz do more chapters of this story, see where it can take ty and cassie, and ty and holly and amanda.

Cheers from a new Fan.

I've read a lot of these stories and this is the first I've ever seen with the word penis in it. Great writing that kept it captivating. I really enjoyed it.

Great story, well written. I really enjoyed reading it. I would love to read more with Amanda and Holly. Well done.

I was so hoping to see some more of Amanda and some Holly sex, but the story was great just the same. keep it up

No way Ty wasnt beating off 3 times a day after making those bras. A 5.

i loved it. the story made me feel good inside and out. the love in the story about cassie brought back some sad old memories but i am happy i still can remember them. thank you making me remember. memories are all i have now, but aqt least i still have them. bob 83 y.o.

I agree with lots of comments on this story.

I feel like it makes a great debut for a follow-up

best parts were Bella coming in front of her sisters & her ex from having her nipple sucked

and Amanda sucking off Ty from nowhere + the comment afterward by Cassie made me think she wouldn't be against a repeat performance, although afterward Amanda complained about the no sharing between sisters rule to which Cassie didn't object or comment so she seems a bit on both sides.

As you can see you got my brains working hahaha

well I really hope you make a follow up

Thanks for the read.

Never read an erotic story that was so long and yet ever so captivating. Good one bruh. 6 stars from me.

Excellent story. THANK YOU

I really enjoyed this. A really good yarn with a well thought out story line.

Thank you

This was a great story. Thank you for posting it.

This story is entertaining, very erotic, and really engaging. I truly enjoyed the plot, to the point of almost imagining being there. Thank You!

This was a great story. I love your characters and the exhibionist tendencies.

Please write more.

Yes please keep writing . Your ability to create strong loving relationships with twisted emotional turns are incredibly erotic.

Well written and very erotic. I liked the way you let the sexual tension build slowly to its conclusion. It's good to see women taking the sexual initiative for a change.

Keep writing, your work brings pleasure to many.

Liked the story but who is Alex? Hate when a character is introduced and not developed!

I liked the way that they were well aware that what they were contemplating, and finally did, would affect their lives. His concern not for himself, but for Cassie seemed honest and heart felt. Cassie was as kind as she could be considering that she wanted what she wanted. The story was well thought out and erotic. Great job and thanks for sharing.

Great tale! Very well written but it needs to continue. Your writing is spot on.

All I can say, is my ex was an only child, bummer. Really enjoyed the story. Terrific build up great characters. Look forward to reading more of your stories.