by dealerofhandoffate
I am surprised no one has left a message before.
I love the premise behind the story.
A sister you did not know you had. Then finding her.
And she was an AMAZING FUCK.
Looking forward to the next 2 chapters.
The concept was good. The editing needed editing. The whole piece was wordy, sometimes saying the same thing three different ways...punctuation, etc. needs much work. All in all, not a bad story, but simply hard to read. 4 stars.
What a whore bitch of a sister. He should send her home and forget about that dominating bitch. I'm passing on the rest of the story.
Of course it's good to find a sister.
But why is she jumping on his dick after only a few hours of knowing him?
What's the reason? What does she want to accomplish?