by rockandroller
instead of a rushed ending after all the buildup, she should have repeated the punchline "you can have me if you want me" while completely naked with plenty of time available. then, repeat the punchline as he enters her, but hesitates. he, of course, surrenders and slams her cunt hard.
by the way, i've been a huge fan of heinlein for about forty years. i don't recall the punchline in any of his stories. which one is it from?
I think that if a story can make you cum, it's a damn good story! Loved all of the ones I've read by you so far! You're Hot !!
The story developed well. The suspence and chance of getting caught were well done. He was worried about his son walking in, but once he started he needed to cum. Keep writing.
Loved your story, kind of hit home. I've been doing my father-in-law for quite some time and hubby is
aware. We even do an occasional 3-some. Guess I should write about some of the things they
have made their little slut do to amuse them.
I came in record time...my heart pounding at the excitement of my husband catching me reading this story. =)
this story was great, especially the "hurrying" and "danger" aspects! I enjoyed imagining her bending over in a daze...truly one of the hottest and naughtiest stories I've read!
thank you.
loved the cadence of "you can have me" that kept beating like a sexual metronome throughout the story. Great tension and anticipation in a well-written story. Thanks for the good work.
This was one of the best stories I've read. It was truly exciting. I was very turned on after reading it.
each time my son gets a new girlfriend she is better than the last. this could be the one i meet next!!
And i'm not just saying that because of all the correct punctuation marks! (Although man... a way to this girls heart let me tell you... ).
Fantastic... my panties are soaked from just reading it... but I want MORE
NICE WELL PUT TOGETHER 4 STARS.............................R...............................
Every father in law should get such caring daughter in law.
My dream is Sunaina
35-28-38
Her ass makes me hard
Had me hooked from the first line. Great build -up from there. Short, quickie sex - Suzi is quite some girl