All Comments on 'Blackout'

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Ashesh9Ashesh9over 10 years ago
Memories ....good , bad or neutral are only ...

Illusions in the Cosmic Web of Maya

DesejoDesejoover 10 years ago

This one doesn't feel done to me. The last three stanzas don't follow what I thought was being set up. Maybe I don't understand it.

twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years ago
5ed

re the structure, only supports so much

cut it back a little, to many, to many words, nice variation the one word as a span between blocks

just my take

tazz317tazz317over 10 years ago
THE TITLE FITS THE ULTIMATE CONCLUSION

which is what we all have in common, TK U MLJ LV NV

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

I like the movement of this, start to finish, but I agree with 1201, could be pared down.

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