Too quick, no build-up, all-in-all, kind of a crappy story.
I wish you had built the rest a little more though.
Shame on people that say bad things as anonymous! It was a lovely story; a little brief perhaps.....but lovely and sexy. Thank you.
I liked the style. Yeah you could lengthen it, but the story felt young and breathless, just right for the characters.
Love the outdoors. Love the mix of sex and domestic chores; gives it realism.
but Daniel got to her goodies and it appears there is more to cum. This could be the first of several chapters--I think we'd all like to read more about these two in the sack.
Good luck in the Summer Lovin' contest.
I liked it. And as others have suggested can we have a series please.
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