by Abazza
Jerry comes back into the bedroom with a shotgun, james and the whore are history, end of problem! (result - worth going to prison for)
This story is a bit short with decent writing. Reminiscent of Salo in it's amorality, the difference being that Salo is a masterpiece. Who knows what this is?
There were so many things that were bad about this not sure where to begin. Do you perpetually take it up the ass, or are you a virgin? Because that's the only way that a dick could make someone's stomach bulge... by going through the anal cavity. The vaginal walls, and the cervix don't allow that kind of depth.
I know that you were striving for sadistic... which I appreciate... but this fell short. Sadism is psychological more than anything. Toying with one's emotions, or physically harming them. This was neither. It just came off as kind of mental, and extremely unbelievable even for fiction. Story telling doesn't seem to be a talent of yours.