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LesseloovesPeterLesseloovesPeterover 10 years ago

This one rambles a bit, might help to think of a poem as having a thesis and editing for stanzas that veer from the thesis... Or do what you want and ignore advice from a random internet stranger. Your choice :-)

theoncomingstormtheoncomingstormover 10 years agoAuthor
Random Internet Stranger

I'm always open for suggestions, advice, and criticism that makes me a better writer so thank you and I will take your advice! :-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Poem vs Thesis

A poem is:

1. A verbal composition designed to convey experiences, ideas, or emotions in a vivid and imaginative way, characterized by the use of language chosen for its sound and suggestive power and by the use of literary techniques such as meter, metaphor, and rhyme.

2. A composition in verse rather than in prose.

3. A literary composition written with an intensity or beauty of language more characteristic of poetry than of prose.

4. A creation, object, or experience having beauty suggestive of poetry.*

A thesis is:

1. A proposition that is maintained by argument.

2. A dissertation advancing an original point of view as a result of research, especially as a requirement for an academic degree.

3. A hypothetical proposition, especially one put forth without proof.I know it shouldn't hurt this bad*

(*source: thefreedictionary.com)

I like your writing. I would have liked this one better if the following verses had not been included. But, I still like it. It is expressive of your emotions and experience. Well done.

And I keep trying to figure out why

I've been sitting here all day

Starring up at the cloudy sky

I finally got it

It made sense at last

The reason that it aches like this

The reason I can't move past

kemanderkemanderabout 10 years ago
You've Written Enough....

To more than prove your capability as a poet and an author. If it comes from your heart, as everything you write seems to do, then let it stream as freely as you choose. I can never criticize what touches me so beautifully and deeply. Follow your own path in your own light, and as your own muse. Thank you for being here.

theoncomingstormtheoncomingstormabout 10 years agoAuthor

Not my best... I'm working on editing it but it was written and posted in the raw.

theoncomingstormtheoncomingstormabout 10 years agoAuthor

Having a hard time going back to it because I'm trying to forget it happened... One of those times where I look at this poem and it makes me sad all over again but hopefully come the new year I'll have edits done

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