by potsherd22
This could be in the "How To' category. How to get a prude wife to open up sexually. Of course she has to have a slut aunt.
Great tale.
Carry on.
Every man dreads these words "Honey love, we need to talk". I'm thinking oh hell here we go again. Then the ending. Laughed my ass off. Thanks.
I like unconventional stories, especially when the couple learns that they had everything they ever needed all along!
Taking an old theme, standing it on its head, and doing something new with it is always a good idea.
Your writings pose is alittle above me so I had to read up to your stories needed the dictionary twice LOL :) very enjoyable thanks for the change of pace in my favourite and only read section LW
I enjoyed your story. I loved your play on words and your intelligent ways of expressing them. Please keep writing. Thank you for the great read!
I think this was much better than your last. I really liked the twist at the end, that the couple they seek to swing with goes off together and the original married couple is "stuck" with each other. It reads as if she has learned that SHE needs to open up and be less prudish in bed, and that will be enough to improve their lovemaking. Being a "dumb 'merican", is IS like being immersed in a different culture reading a work like yours. The flowery language in this one WAS well executed, and transported (at least this reader) me someplace else. I think you achieved your goals with this pleasant flash story. It was well crafted, with a decent lesson, and even a dynamic change for the characters. Bravo!
He got lucky and perhaps will get luckier. He really has the right idea.
I was wondering if she was letting him come in her? It began to sound as if there might be a problem with the mechanics of the deal!
I liked this story very much. The British dialect was a little confusing at times but still understandable. Thanks.
when it works its fantastic if not Katy Bar The Door, TK U MLJ LV NV
And obviously from my neck of the woods - Leicestershire. I'l take a guess at the name of the pub as being the "Hope and Anchor" on the Soar/canal just outside Syston.
5***** You forgot.........There was the third chance in the air. She could become a cheater...............However the main charcter was lucky.
The dude is a pathetic cunt. Clearly she's cluelessly naive about how to handle her marriage, and he even knows what her problem is and that she's willing to fix it. Yet he doesn't have the balls to say anything to her?
Shit like this is why marriages break.
I would say that this couple each out-smarted each other. Story made for a good read.
I didn't like the story very much at all. Sorry 'bout that!
She gets along well with her Aunt, but still attends to her Mommy as well! I see nothing in here that reduces Sweetie's link to her Mother's teachings! She will be tentative and conflicted until (unless) she re-evaluates those negative attitudes! If she DOES change her behavior AND allows herself to enjoy those sensations, she may get on the right track! However, those are both problematic! Best wishes for them (in their little digital love nest!)
Refreshing and clever.
Being a flash story it was never meant to be meticulous, so addressing the "mother - daughter frigidity induced by religious upbringing" aspect was unnecessary. Think about it, Gwen's familiy's relationship with the libertine aunt was tenuous so for Gwen to confide in her proved she had an independent streak which couldn't be constrained by her mother...
Good story, great to see this not turn into BTB. Reminded me of the 1979 song Escape- the piña coloda song. 4*
When you start throwing around words like atavistic, codswallop and meduck, I feel like I'm back in English 101. But over all, this was a clever and entertaining tale about a married couple seemingly suffering from the doldrums. Well played.
I really liked it. By the way, Carole was a much better fuck than Gwen, though Gwen had the tighter pussy. And she did orgasm for me.
Thanks for writing my story
Frank
he overheard the conversation.
Best of all outcomes? They have an affair with each other.
Superb, light hearted humor, excellent word play. As to the sex loving aunt, nothing wrong with that, and for the reader to refer to her as slutty is to misuse the adjective. Love a fathfull wife that loves sex!
Well DOne
Chilley
I sure appreciate your stories, and wish I could put pen to paper as you can.
Thank you for sharing.
Tony NZ
Very well written & told; the Yanks are far better at slap stick writing, but for classy tongue in check dialogue you can't go pass the Poms. Short, to the point & oh so sweet. 5 big *****
The first Lit writer to use the word Desultory :))
And probably the first to use Reticent correctly.
Well done, Mate!
Just closet cuck posturing. In reality if a wife was as prudish and anti sexual as her. Her husband would have to be the same to even tolerate it. Any husband that is as sexually experienced as you define Harry. Would have pressed the issue years before or would have walked. Any man who could even contemplate opening their marriage to make it more exciting is better off not getting married in the first place. At least be honest enough to live single than to get married and ruin both lives.
sounds like a vicious circle with no control or stoppage, TK U MLJ LV NV
...and a little silly. It was fun to read a story about a truly loving wife.
I enjoyed it. Flowed along nicely and I could picture the characters. Sauce for the goose is sauce for the gander is always the answer to "I want to try someone else."
Well done thank you. Marie.
Really enjoyed this light hearted what's-good-for-the-goose-and-gander tale, with a sweet outcome.
I enjoyed the initial idea behind this story but Harry's attitude completely ruined it. It was a cute notion, the husband overhearing that his wife was feeling neglected and was opening up to the idea of being more adventurous in their lovemaking. If he'd teased her a bit then quit and chose to give her an education in sex, then it would have been fine. Instead we're subjected to this incredibly distasteful, amazingly selfish thought process wherein he thinks to himself that it's just fine and dandy if some other asshole fucks his wife and teaches her how to be a better lover since she'll eventually come back to him and he'll benefit. If you're wondering why anonymous commenters call you interesting names like "Brit cuck," these are the types of ideas that cause it.
No, they never actually swapped partners but it certainly wasn't from lack of trying. Simply put, Harry is a selfish prick who doesn't give a shit about his wife so long as he ends up having decent sex again. His poor wife loves and misses his physical presence and wants to make things better. She wants to have his baby and misses the passion and sexual attraction he used to display towards her. Completely understandable desires and ones he should have been overjoyed to hear her express. So, rather than, oh, I dunno... COMMUNICATING with her, he decides to play fucking head games to "teach her a lesson" and doesn't care if it blows up in his face so long as he gets his dick wet. Would have served this asshole right if Gwen HAD fucked another guy and been so blown away by the experience that she left Harry for him.
I imagine this story was meant to be amusing but it's never funny to see a guy who couldn't give a shit about the woman he married and that's what this story's about. The most emotion this guy gave towards his wife was that he "devoutly hoped" agreeing to fuck other people wouldn't lead to a divorce but maybe that would be OK. I didn't laugh at this story or find it cute. I felt sad that Gwen was wasting her love on a selfish prick who could take or leave her.
The category listed is "Loving Wives", not "Humor and Satire"! Any serious or even semi-serious story considering that bum as "Blessed", would get a negative infinity of stars as my rating.
If other outcome and you don't care about fidelity good luck
3 stars
You wrote
To Anonymous...
Note when we Brits talk about the Blessed Woody Allen its because we think he's a pillock!
Its called irony. Ok?
A very interesting premise. I would have enjoyed to see if this actually moved their relationship to a better place. Thank you for the story.
I love that one of your comments couldnt read it because it was english. Sad reflection in the american education system