All Comments on 'New Life Ch. 02'

Nicely done. Spelling still needs work.. but a great story.. :)

Your writing is great, keep up the good work

i can see the asshole coming out in daniel now. he will claim her as his mate and not give a damn for how or what she feels or wants.

I understand she has a hard life and is subject to be somewhat defensive. However, all that attitude is a bit rude and I quite frankly struggle with liking her character

Don't see where Daniel is being an asshole. Anya definitely has a bit of an attitude. She already had this preconceived idea of Luna's pack or how all rich people will be before she got there. You would think she would give the pack the benefit of the doubt since Luna told her that she would be OK at the pack's house.

Anya is going to fight Daniel because she thinks he is an asshole but its OK for her to have an attitude. She is attracted to him so her pride is going to push him away. She doesn't have to jump into bed with him, there isn't anything wrong with being just friends till she is comfortable with him.

Your story is very good so far and I am enjoying it. I like the characters and their development so far; I can see the budding relationship between Daniel and Anya. It really is a good story and I really like it, except for the poor spelling and grammar. You need to do a better job of proof reading.

I enjoyed the chapter...I still feel like it would be good to clean up one more time, but that said, editors on here are oftentimes volunteering their time for no pay and people saying stuff about mistakes still being bad can hurt. There were a few spots that could have been cleaned up still, so maybe next time go over it one last time. The story itself developed nicely. I see two good friends who haven't had an equal friendship and if I were Anya, I'd be a bit ticked if I told all my secrets to my friend and they didn't, esp if it wasn't against the rules to 'tell humans.' But, I found it to be a good technique for telling her story. I had assumed that Luna was Gregg's mate, but didn't think they were mated yet or lived together. That's cute. I think Geoffrey is the alpha's son right? Look forward to seeing where things go between them and at what speed. Not much is keeping her at home. I just hope she can bring her dog..he should be respected there..maybe he's a long lost cousin~ j/k

lol.