All Comments on 'Mandy's Sorority Initiation Ch. 05'

This a great series, and the short chapters are keeping me interested. You've done a good job setting the scene and creating some good characters.

carry on!

Thanks-

I'm glad you're enjoying it.

XOXO

Alexis

Fantastic story. Looking forward to many more chapters!!

This is the first series I have tracked and enjoyed. Excellent. Some observations (not criticisms):

You write well but I wonder if you had written the whole series first and then read it there might have been some changes. The back and forth works but at times needs a switch to provide some context - such as 'that was a Tuesday a month ago" or "the month before". The US sorority system is not copied in UK and Europe so some readers might not relate to age/maturity of the players. I think your level of aggression sometimes rises too fast. There might be stages between that could add to your build up and intensity.

Any more chapters coming soon?

I've got chapter 6 up. I've written chapter 7 but have been slammed with other work lately. Hope to have it finished in a week or so.

Glad you like the story!

XOXO

Alexis