This could have gone so many ways, but in the end Deshaun received his comeuppance. In some of your passage it appeared that Deshaun was trying to find his way...hmm, we will never know. I wish that you would have elaborated more on the FBI detective and Chase, something not quite kosher there, but you brushed it aside. Overall I enjoyed the story, it felt a bit rushed. I am looking forward to reading more of your work.
I can't express how much I loved this story!!! So many emotions were brought to me. I cried of sadness, fear, happiness, lust and everything in between. You are a wonderful author and this story is a 10! Great job!!
Go away Veronika, no one wants your nasty pictures. This is not the place for that, and I hope to God no one is stupid enough to send you money in the mail.
Again, great job IR2R!
Loved it. I was hoping Deshaun would've come to his senses at the end so he didn't have to die but he needed to be put out of his misery.
So darn cute!!! Dylan and Keisha rock!!!
My only regret is that Deshaun did not suffer enough. Even in the end it was all about him. A gun shot was too quick. It would have been nice if Dylan could of taken a hatchet and torn Deshaun piece by piece.
And the kids are adorable.
I love the happy ending.
Iread I wish you had extended the demise of Deshaun and let him devolve completely into insanity. But he died, so that's something. I'm glad things worked out, loved the kids. Please keep writing.
He was nuts, and I enjoyed peaking into his crazy thoughts. Please write more. Create another dastardly villain we can love to hate.
However Deshaun's death didn't involve pain and torture. Keisha and Dylan got married and added a little boy to their family. So precious, glad to see the growth in Keisha. Excellent writing!
your story very much enjoyed the story
Thank you everyone who read this series. I truly appreciate it. I am extremely grateful that you have stayed with me through my attempts at writing, mistakes and all. You inspire me and make me want to be better. I'm not sure whether this story is done, or if another story will be born, but I'll let you know.
Keep checking my page for future updates.
You all are the best.
I loved it though i do wish things were a bit slower and evolved slower but i loved it none the less!!! great job
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