All Comments on 'First Time'

You captured it so vividly. Just spent 10 minutes trying to separate what I think it was like and and what was the actual. You hit embarassingly close to the mark. Lucky you didn't have poison ivy. Sigh

what saves potentially fatal material (all material is potentially fatal) are the asides

the mosquitoes

and that is a damn good ending

I applaud your commenting on others material

high 5

Gold standard ISO 2001 validation !!! Need i comment further ??

I am humbled by y'alls high opinion of my writing. It's a gift, 10000 hours be damned, I was born with it. Words just come out. I can't stop them. It's nice to have them appreciated, you guys have no idea.

greatly

the real trick is in edit

and when not to write

you will master that. i see it already beginning

I agree that that mosquito theme raises this poem above the crowd. Nicely done.