All Comments on '43 Hours straight'

by todski28

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twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years ago
good

scraps of wrappers

scattered about,

do more

5ed

LesseloovesPeterLesseloovesPeterover 10 years ago

but what will you do with the next 5?

Oldbear63Oldbear63over 10 years ago
Feel it with you Todski

Really liked the last stanza - brought it home.

todski28todski28over 10 years agoAuthor
To lesse

Sleep!!

TsothaTsothaalmost 10 years ago

I wonder if salty thoughts has the same meaning in English as it has in my language; it would seem so. I can see how one would have salty thoughts, in this situation. I agree about the last stanza, and I particularly like 6 and 7 (scattering a smattering of small debris). I'm not much of a rhyme guy, as you know, but I make up for it by really liking alliterations.

I know this is probably long past, but I hope you've made a full recovery (from your description, I'd guess this was a very traumatic event).

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