All Comments on 'Her Heart, His Prey Ch. 04 Pt. 1'

why didnt the vamp blood change them?

Please do keep writing this story it is so heart warming and so well written PLEASE keep on as I love it so much. F**K others and there comments if they don't like it they can go elsewhere.

I just have a few things to say. The first thing is they are forgetting that she is human. To have thought that someone really loved you and wants to be with you for the rest of your life, then to have them leave you for your sister is an extremely. Hard thing to deal with. Plus she's only 19, everything seems so much worse and life ending when your younger. Cassian needs to give her so so me time which he is and I love it. So glade you're back I was worried. Love this story!

I can't wait to read more I think I've found a new favorite author and story :-)

but David is a pushy, insensitive jerk. I wish her sister could do without him.

Keep up the good work!

Hopefully you will write a another chapter soon!

finally.. you are backk.. thanks for not giving up this wonderful story... please continue..

Especially a promise. Probably the most frustrating conversation in the entire chapter, I couldn't understand why he felt he had a right to demand/expect that from her.

Other then that, great work, I'm enjoying your story.

Who the heck does he think he is to demand something from her after what he did.....I get the whole mate thing but he should of come clean as soon as he found out ........I just don't really care for him I kinds of wish the sister was kind of evil and ended hurting him but I know it won't happen.......so any ways glad your back I really missed ya, love your story except David....hope you update soon ...hurry plz don't make us wait....

Will they realize and respond to the betrayal Mar experienced, not to mention the embarrassment? Why are they allowed to continually be in her space? The scene where Charlotte came looking for her, not cool, cat, not cool. Why are they allowed to witness Mar's vulnerability and the discovery of her loving feelings towards Cassian?

Clearly, I am loving the story, I just want a little compassion shown for Mar... Keep writing, you are doing a great job.

HAHA. Inconsistent povs and multiple character first person povs are my greatest pest peeves. That said, I commend you for writing everything in first until this chapter. It is nice to see the story in her perspective, that leaves us readers guessing. It's no fun if we know everything. I haven't read anything like this before so you definitely got me with your plot. I have a sister and I just can't believe Charlotte lol xD I would have expected her to resist him for her sake. But nooooo. Anyway, there might be people like that in real life. I also want to give that David a beating. Why does he feel entitled to anything? He knew she wasn't his soul mate, then why would he offer her a marriage? And he didn't have the decency to give her space. Just weeks after that stunt he pulled, she finds him with her sister and her apartment. That jerk! And how dare he demand a promise from her? He had no right to do that! I don't like him. /lists his name and Charlotte's in my black list/ Just work on your execution and flow and everything will be fine :D

This is a delightful story. Sure, it could benefit from some editing, but you've got a good story line developing and character development is coming along. Keep up your writing as long as it brings you pleasure to share the gift of your imagination.

Please, please, please do something about David and Charlotte. If I was in Mar's place, I would have not given them the time of day. She makes excuses for Charlotte and the fact that she WILLINGLY stole her sister's groom. David deserves something bad happening to him. He should die from a vampire attach, take Charlotte too. How dare he demand Mar to promise him something after he DECEIVED her? Ugh, I LOVE LOVE LOVE your story so much, but wish they would give her space to heal.

Love the story. Hate david. Hate Charlotte. What kind of person would do that to thier sister that they "love", and the person they're going to marry. I feel like something awful should happen to them, or they need to figure out exactly what they did to her, and how bad it hurt. I actually really like the story, and the best ones are the ones that drag you in like this. But PLEASE give david and charlotte a taste of thier own medicine.

I get the blood is thicker than water thing but,wtf!!!! Keep up the good work!!!

I loike :D Looking forward to the rest...Hope everything is going well on yer end...no matter how long it takes you to finish it, I will continue to read your writings :D

Yay for updates

I am truly happy that you are continuing the story, there are too many people on here who start but never finished and they bring all writers to shame for that.

I love this series because it feels like actual people trying to get through life, but after that very long wait, I would like to see some actual erotica. The story is getting very boring to me, and I dont know if I would even want to continue reading. The website is called literotica, and you have 4 chapters with little to no erotica and if that was thecase I would have picked a finished series from the "No sex" category or go read another book.

Please add erotic scenes to the next chapter, and more importantly please continue it. I love the series, but it is getting so sentimental and repetitive.

I love your writing ,but please add some sex with Cassian and Marlow. (Soon)

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That's a sweet ending of a chapter, made me smile. I like where this is going, yay for updates :)

Your great can't wait for your next chapter

This story is very interesting, won't you please continue it? Hopefully you are better than those who write for reviews, but if you do update with a more regular schedule and bring this story to a satisfying conclusion, I can foresee it becoming one of the beloved stories on this site, because it has all that in the making :). Please please write more!

Ohhhh my. You have serious talent and I'm in love. If I beg will you write more? I cannot wait for Marlow to give into Cassian, he loves her so much. I love how this actually has an amazing story line as well as plenty of sexual chemistry (hopefully something a little further along as bases go soon too?) and I can honestly get lost in the story. Alright, now I'm begging. Please.

Pleas I need more. I love this story, please write me more....

Please write morreee

Seriously. Fuck him and his sanctimonious 'yeah it happened but surely we can just move past it right this minute' bullshit. Granted David's entirely correct that Marlow needs to not punish Cassian for what he did in a previous relationship, but he has no fucking right to get I'm her face and demand the issue be immediately resolved. He played with her feelings like they were inconsequential, was content to marry her to keep a close eye on her, then was caught with his tongue down her sister's throat with NO thought to how humiliating that would be for her, because of course, she's just human. He straddles the human and wolf world, and in the human world he has no fucking moral high ground to stand on.

I think, had he shouted in my face not two weeks from ending our relationship, no matter what he way saying, the urge to break his nose with my forehead would have been too strong to resist.

It's a flaw, I'm sure.

fuck david

This is a great story so far!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!

Need to know what is going to happen with this story!

whats wrong? cat got your pen?

Looking forward to what happens NEXT... Please, don't leave us hanging.

Can someone please finally finish what they've started and stop leaving the readers hanging?

Aahhh, please finish. This is one of many stories I've gotten into that have just dropped. This is discouraging. I'll probably forget to ever check in on it again.

Please continue this was awesome.

It is so good, and so captivating. I need you to finish it!!! Please do not leave us hanging like so many others do!!!

This story is progressing along quite nicely now. I do appreciate that there is not immediate sex between the two protagonists. That they take a week of talking, and sleeping next to one another in bed. And that they still have work to do but progress is slow. It makes it flow more seemly and it feels so much more believable to me then almost every other Werewolf story I have read.

I greatly appreciate your work and this series is a testament to your skills and understanding as a writer. Thus I strongly urge you to continue to weave the webs of this story, to create many more chapters as you need, so we can flesh out our two beloved protagonists.

I hope that you keep being inspired and write to your fullest.

Please, I beg you to keep writing this series. These people deserve to have their life stories told. Do not let this great work go unfinished, it is to good to become a lost saga.

I am begging you! This story is incredible and your writing is beautiful and effective. I honestly can't imagine how time consuming this must be and I sure as hell can't write like this, but if you can spare the time please do! I'll be checking back!

At the risk if sounding just like everyone else....FINISH THE STORY. I know life happens, but don't start if you'll leave us hanging! It's painful! Love what you've done so far.

No end? It's like you've bern kidnaped by some hot werewolves or something :P but really please come back to this story one day!!

Sigh. And they never even got to complete their mating :-(

I’m getting so tired of being crushed when an author abandons such an amazing story.

I created a list, open to the public, of incomplete series I hopes of it helping to deter this issue.