All Comments on 'Santa's Photo Shoot'

I like the details you give about the characters. Good stoy and super sexy!

After managing to finish the story, I'm thoroughly confused as to who exactly is telling the story. You switch from different perspectives constantly, and your sentence structure is confusing. Some advice: pick one perspective and use it consistently throughout the story, establish a timeline, because while reading this, figuring out when the characters get to different destinations is impossible, and be sure to check your grammar and spelling. I'm sure the story would have been wonderful if it wasn't for the errors listed above.

Such an enjoyable experience. Keep writing!

Wow, I've never viewed Santa or Rudolph as every enjoying sex...excellent job at telling this passionate tale of sex.