All Comments on 'A Little Bit of Faith'

Lliked these characters & story beyond the obvious. In a way, I wish these two had each had boyfriend and girlfriend to draw out the collecting of bet. The author did a fantastic job for first time out especially pre-test jitter bit. I also loved the teasing and pseudo-antagonistic aspect, if there's a sequel ( please ) that feature should/,could be highlighted to great advantage.

You did a great job. Hope you write more about these two and have them go all the way with each other. Explore each other bodies more and more.

That this is your first story. It was so well written that it seemed like you've been writing in this genre and topic for years! Romantic and sweet, and sexy! Five stars!!

it was a really good start keep it up

Great Story keep it going the next chapter

Keep writing this was an amazing story.

Look forward to the next. 5 stars

Nicely done, young man!

now continue with the same intensive style and you will find that you are well on your way to becoming a monied author.

You do have great potential.

I enjoyed this, and would welcome another chapter or so.

But find what you want to write, dont feel locked in to one genre, although incest seems to be good for you.

Please continue posting whatever you do.

You hit the intensity level just right. Please continue as I am sure everyone that reads this is going to want to know what happens next to Jamie and Faith.

Great start. Just go where your mind takes you. Looking forward to the next chapter.

I for one appreciate that there was no 10in dong, 32fff tits, or huge muscles involved and that you realistically portrayed the circumstances to winning the desired trophy. Then to play on the way things would really go were they were each willing to forgive the bet but admitted that they did not want to, all made the sex act complete. Great job, I hope the specifics give you muse for the next highly anticipated chapter.

I need a little sister like her

Nothing more to say... Looking forward to the next chapter for sure. I've been reading stories on this site for years, and this is the first time commenting. So that within itself should tell u something.

For me, it's weird when you call each other brother or sister in the midst of the action. Once you established the relationship, just go with names or pet names. Just my .02

I agree about the realistic quality. I like that she wasn't a cheerleader or perfect and his cock wasn't huge. The buildup was good and the whole thing was very erotic. The "good girl" thing was perfect.

This was a great story when I red the intro I that is was other brother bet his snobby sister for sex I was wrong how you did it you make them both want it to happen but not over doin I hope you keep writing about Jamie and faith it seem like they could fall in love with each. I'm hoping you make a part to of this but bottom line keep writing you are damn good

Great story! More please. Same characters or new ones.

well written, was as tho i was in the room, enjoying a young puckered mouth desiring more. tom

Excellent story, thanks for writing it. My only critical remark would be how quickly the bet was formulated.

I want you're PS 3

Fuck you that's never going to happen

There must be something you'd want for it?

Nothing short of sex with a hot girl

Ewww that's gross I'm your sister!

That to me should've been the initial dialogue, followed by a breakdown to "what if I could get you a Blow Job?" and then to "what if I gave you the blow job?"

His sister acquiesced too quickly, unless there was some previous fascination on her part with her brother and the idea of Taboo Sex. You did elude to her struggle with her own issues around popularity but not enough to have her make the 'Jump' from can you hook me up with one of your friends, to can I suck your cock. Of course that would turn your two page story into a six page story quite easily.

Other than that I liked it Five Stars

Great job, especially on your first attempt! I would love to see them in another chapter. He could return the favor.

Awesome story. Look forward to reading your work for years to come.

I'm highly critical of stories in this category. You did very well. Thank you.

Good read - looking forward to the next instalment. If you can edit it, then this HTML tag could use a tweak:

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Once again, nice work - thanks for sharing :)

Got a nice little stiffy here and at 61 years old that is appreciated. Yes I would love to read more of the adventures of James and Faith. Either the two of them or as they explore with others, alone as a pair. remember, college is coming. Thanks for the realistic behavior between the two siblings and explaining how Faith deals with challenges. Good first story

A very good story......building slowly then to the bet, the suspense of the exam scores and then his shy inexperienced sister follows his lead to reward him !!

I think the next story chapters should be they do try it again, he does the same plus licks her to orgasm while playing and maybe fingering her butt.

They both want to go further. She tells him maybe of her fantasies........ thank you.

It was a very good read and I enjoyed it immensely. The tone, the build up, the plot--all of it just seemed to work.

Congrats on a fine piece of work

I enjoyed the story. You have a good style of writing and building up to the payoff. Thank you!

No, Jamie, that's what plenty of big brothers'd love their little sis to do to them, it's just natural. Mr. First Time author, JD, you did very, very good. Faith and Jamie, as you describe them, become real kids, loving big brother and baby sister. Faith is an innocent in matters of sex, so the first time she sees her brother's big hard cock and heavy loaded balls she's fascinated, mesmerized--so that's what boys look like, hey, that's really neat! Her adorable little coochie gets wet, and that makes Jamie's cock even harder. He loves seeing his kid sister's sweet little slit covered with her girl-dew. He guides Faith with care and concern to take his fat cock in her mouth and all the way to her throat. Jamie sees his cock plugged into his baby sister's face, and he's over the moon. Faith puts her whole heart into sucking her brother's cock, and Jamie can't take it anymore. He blows his brotherly balls in his little sis's mouth, filling it with the biggest load of creamy semen he's ever shot. Sweet Faith loves the taste of her brother's semen (good girl!) and swallows every drop. I think, though, that Jamie's already noticed another place, maybe an even better place, to unload his young balls. Faith's got a cute little cunt that needs to get broken in and reamed out, and Jamie's got the stiff cock to do that righteous job, with love and care and passion. Maybe in the next installment, Mr JD?

as I am reading this I felt that it was real, like I am watching all of this happen. Great job on the story and I hope to see more of this story.

Wonderful story with a nice buildup. Hope to see you continue this particular storyline and I look forward to seeing more from you.

Nice build up and a great finish. keep this one going .....

You managed a great blend of suspense and sensuality as you built the tension in the story. I noticed a couple of typos, but nothing worth complaining about. More important than correct spelling is the content of the story, which you nailed. Too many new authors either rush the sexual aspect of a story, or fail to build a solid foundation, or even fail to flesh out the characters of the story. You did a wonderful job in all three of those areas. I hope you decide to continue writing, either a continuation of this storyline, or new ones. You're already ahead of many of your peers, and the more you write, the better I'd expect your writing to become. Five stars for this story.

It was a good story and I would love to read more. The way you left it open is a good point to pick it up for the next chapter.

i guess everyone here reading and writing all the stories, and i will bet every story has some kind of an engish mistake, but i will bet that there is not one person here that passed on writing an outline on sentences in english class, and if there was one here, i will bet he authors books,

Very good! Keep writing.

Really enjoyed the way you weave a tale...hope there are many more following these two and their exploring together!!!

Since Faith no longer owes him a BJ, the next time she gives him one, James could reciprocate. From here on out he could teach her about the pleasures of sex, just like he taught her about giving head -- one step at a time.

Hot little story!! Thanks for sharing looking forward to future submissions.

Definitely continúe, very good all the way through

Reminds me of a movie I've seen ;)

This is a great read, I really enjoyed the concept behind it and it was well written.

I hope to see more parts in the future, perhaps we could see something about school life (or something like that) and see a bit of background :) Hope to see more from you

Def. continue this story.

A very good story, well written and steadily builds to the climax. Pun intended.

You clearly have a series here, do continue it. I know I would love to hear more on how this relationship develops.

Excellent!! Keep it up!!

now that they went that far time to take her virginity bareback of course!!

This was a very well written story. What I liked about it was the fact that you dwelt on the complexity of the pyschology of the situation and also that you didn't use any of the trite bs so many authors use---"she had a 55 inch chest with EEEE bust, and had nipples that extended 12 inches which was almost as long as my penis." Keep writing please.

A great story, first time or not - just as first sex can be great... or not so. That said, I thought Faith came up with the blow job bet so quickly, she must have had something like that on her mind. But how could it come out? Maybe the suddenness is best. And she didn't renege when given the chance. The pre-sex and sex scenes were nicely done, and the hint of more to come at the end. 'Loved the bit of Faith getting off rubbing her panty covered slit and clit on Jamie's cock. Maybe she'll do the same in Ch2... except bareback... and accidents happen, like she goes forward a bit too far, and he pops up just a bit and she slides back and he is suddenly in her a bit, and she likes the sensation, etc. That's one of my favorite memories...err... fantasies.

You need to rethink the physical perspective, though. In order for sis to be at eye lever with his crotch, you be would need to be over 4 feet high. To the say a moment later that she lifted his chin to make eye contact and that their bodies came together is completely impossible. Then, the idea that the bro, who was out of his mind with excitement over the situation would stop to tease his sister defies reality. BTW, buys ignored her because she has a huge, fat ass. Some may like the concept, but for me it's a big turn off.. I know these comment seems harsh, especially the other feedback you've received has been pretty positive, but it's meant to make you think more about your writing and become better. That's your goal, I assume.

Keep writing and improving.

A very well written story... keep up the good work!

I think Faith should keep her virginity for a while, it would suck to take it so soon, you should work on her nice big butt for a while before just plunging into her pussy n taking such a precious item from her. Work with her n play with her ass for a while.

By the way pls don't get her pregnant it ruins this beautiful story!!!

U must continue this story, MUST! Plz!

Very subtle psychological abuse employed by the older brother in his position of authority over his younger sister. Made it seem to her that it was all her idea with characteristic Machiavelli cunning.

A terrific and invigorating read!

Make them fuck next time!

Keep it just b'ween dem, dnt ad more ppl, plz cnt diz.

If my beautiful sister gave me a mind blowing orgasm like that, I could not help but turn her over and eat her to complete satisfaction.

What a let down....

Only 4 stars on this one.....

He needs to eat his sister's pussy, make sis his little love slave and private slut and fuck her long and hard. Make her his own slut and never share her!

really enjoyed it!

really good stuff, great work. best thing I can say about it is that I was annoyed when it ended because I need more from these two :)))

Great build up. I would have to agree with the feedback posted about continuing and him returning the favor. I would agree for the first few chapters keep it between them but after that, and they have had sex, if you feel the characters leading you for either the parents or her friends, go for it! I'll definitely keep reading regardless!

and N0! Please! Don't add more people into this, keep it between them, it's sweet. besides, taboo relationships is perfect if its between two individuals sharing the forbidden fruit. Don't ruin this, please.

The story had so much potential and the writer exhibates so much talent that there should have been more...Jay.

And why didn't he return the favor?

I agree with some of the comments that it was a little short and is crying for a chapter 2. However, the writing was a very high quality and there were no outstanding grammatical or type errors so I gave you a 5. More of these two kids is called for. Good luck on your continued writing.

It was a well written & erotic story, and maybe would have been hotter if there was a series of crossed lines in a slow build-up to get to the end "bet". Very nice overall & I hope you continue to write additional chapters as there are many more avenues to explore. :)

I wish I had a good girl like you.

Waiting for the next time.

Hurry.

Story was really good and i cant what to read one where faith fucks her brother Jamie

My compliments on a great first effort.

This is how Big Brother/Little Sister stories should be...

If Jamie was like that for oral sex, I'd love to read him taking her virginity...

Please send out a Ch. 2...

Not eat the pussy and that big ass. Love it and it will love you back.

An excellent story and like another commentator, I almost never comment here, so I was really impressed. I guess it's the hallmark of the very best authors to end somewhat quickly leaving the reader wanting more.

I am desperate to get sequels to this and I would love for you to turn it into a series. Your writing quality is superb and I really liked the setup and buildup - like you say, not too quickly because then it's just boring sex. The story is much greater when there is an emotional connection behind the sex and the reader really understands the characters.

Yes, please write more if you can - it would be fantastic. I read a lot of literature (not just erotic) and this is the best I've read in a while.

I enjoyed it. keep em coming.

I really enjoyed this one. Characterization good, believable, showed love and care, well done! I hope there is another one, maybe this time Jamie going down on Faith, then a 3rd installment, and a fourth, and a ... Well you get the picture. I gave you 5 *s.

Its masterpiece. Such a shame its don't have a sequel.

So, You wanted feedback on your story. Here's what I can say. It's rather expertly written out, no debate about that, but backstory and character interaction seems to be lacking. Remember, Jamie and Faith aren't the only ones speaking, and that scene with the mother and the grades didn't last long enough to appreciate. You want depth if you're going to go for a story like this, so, all in all, I think you should keep writing and advancing this story, but only if you plan on making it last, a long time.

This story is amazing wrote, expertly executed and keeps the attention throughout. It has great visuals and I love it. Make more!! :D

This is a great story, and a fantastic one as a first piece. When I clicked on your name to see what else you'd written and found nothing, I was afraid that you'd gotten caught in a hate wave from trolls, but that didn't happen. The only question is: Why haven't you written anything else? Your background at the beginning makes it apparent you know what you're doing with incest stories. You could easily create stories this good again. Where are they?

Wish he would've made love to her.

This was fantastically written, made me feel things I haven't felt while reading a story in a while. Please more? :D

What a good girl. Great 1st story. So many firsts. First kiss, first French kissing, first boy to see, to touch and to suck her tits. First time rubbing her pussy against a cock. First boy to see her pussy. First lick, kiss, sucking, deep throating of a cock. First taste of pre-cum and cum and first swallow.

Very well written and very hot.

Thanks Sorry you stopped.

That was hot. I love brother sister stories. Jamie was lucky to have sister like that.

It was well written. Hopefully you'll find time to write more

Loved this story like I was there in the room

Love incest stories

Was intimate with my sister years ago done everything but full sex still today would love too