All Comments on 'Becoming Her Bitch'

by seotyknam

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mel_pomenemel_pomeneover 10 years ago
Don't give up!

This was very good, particularly for a first offering. You must keep writing! What an introduction - very well done, welcome and please bring us lots more.

Thank you - five stars!

FA_JFFA_JFover 10 years ago

You most certainly should continue writing. This didn't 'get me off,' but only because of personal preferences. You tell your story well. You put us firmly in his head space and through his eyes, we can clearly understand her. The dialogue is appropriately sparse and believable. Well done.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Sweet

Hey, this is right up my alley. No pun intended. Carry on for sure :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
This was great!!!

You have a real talent! You should continue on this story!!

seotyknamseotyknamover 10 years agoAuthor
Wow

Thanks so much for the feedback, I never imagined it would be so popular! I've definitely got some ideas for a sequel, so I'll put something else up soon.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
gooood

I love that story !!!! More please more !!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
More

Please write more of this

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
amazing

this story is amazing! you have such a great mind for this. i am totally imagining it and almost shoved a household item in my ass to see how the guy in the story felt

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
A Start

Page 1 was great, page 2 left me wanting more. Let the woman take the lead.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
!!!!

Your FIRST erotica?! Holy crap, you are a pro, the teasing, the intensity, the submission, please more! We crave your beautiful, descriptive words

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

love it! wish I could be a slave to her!

SonomaAlSonomaAlover 8 years ago
Being Emily's whore

Great. Loved it. I could feel her inside me. In m pussy. I think of my asshole as my pussy. I felt every inch of that big dildo go into me. My tits hurt from the clamps. Both put them on my tits and taking them off. Yes I would love to be her whore/slave. Ready to go on to Chapter 2. Great reading!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

Definitely my favorite story

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Very good

That was a very good start.i can,t wait to read the rest.please write more.thanks.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Bitch boy

You have written a good beginning, hope you have more, turn thematically living couple and a lifestyle couple... again nice work

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

This was very hot. Way to go.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

I fucking loved this. I've always been fantasizing with being this submissive, and I shared it with my gf. She wants to try domination, and she's asked me to find a good story to inspire her, and fuck... I think tonight will be fucking great 😈

jennifurzoejennifurzoealmost 2 years ago

To be totally used and abused

Claudia69Claudia697 months ago

Great start to a series..I like the way this story started with the submissive guy being told to piss his pants at the coffee shop..

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