All Comments on 'Woman'

The more I read this the more I like it.

It is a well constructed and evocative picture of (presumably but one can always be wrong) a woman with an irregular and not too healthy heart beat.

First time I read it, I then thought ... and so? Reading it again I feel no need of anything additional.

I look forward to reading more by you.

I really appreciate the feedback

This is quite good. Although it certainly could be about someone with a bad heart in the physical sense, I think there is a lot more going on. It seems to be aimed at someone without being specific who so as to apply to many. For some reason I get the sense it was written for an alcoholic mother but I may be reading way too much in. (It also has the feel of Sylvia Plath's "Daddy") But a good poem should allow for many interpretations and this one certainly does.

I don't know what happened to my comment. I swear I posted it this morning. I thought the diction and enjambment were outstanding. Also, skilled use of punctuation added to the dramatic effect for me.

Thank you all for your kind words! Also, I love that I now know that the word "enjambment" exists :)

I really like the flow of the words in this. The drop from s1,l1 to s1,l2 ("Pressed my ear / Hard,"), from s1,l3 to s1,l4 ("hear the / Predictable,"), and the break at "Erratically" (s2,l2).

I agree with Koba below; your choice of words ("warm beat" / "sound of ice" / "hitting the edge" / "angry drunk") point toward emotional turmoil rather than a heart condition. Nicely done.

a multitude of interpretations, and evocative,