by lovecraft68
You have done a very good job of writing this. The foot caught in a string getting the protagonist caught was well played story telling. I have very much enjoyed your writing style. Do you actually suffer ridicule about not writing for a slow build up reader following?
How would a young woman with a crush on another young woman react over the weekend of her initial Sapphic seduction?
Would she ask the woman she has trusted for years to help her seduce her high school chum?
I definitely would love if you started writing a serie in the lesbian category.
You could teach a lot!
It was well worth the time to read good build up and excellent ending good job thank you
If this is your first foray into this topic, I say bring it on...it was tender, erotic, realistic and bold and brash at the same time...you built to a strong climax (pun intended) well and yet left us wanting more. Please keep going
A script from you should be very welcome on any porn set.
Scrub that, on any erotic movie set.
Need I say I enjoyed that very much.
Damn, for your first time you completed a marveleous piece of work. Great build up, excellent flirting and the sex part very well done. Seems there could even be a few extra chapters of how she seduces the mother and keeps Mandy and Karen satisfied..
Keep writing as your work is very, very good.
now that was great so what will the next one be with Karen helping Mandy with Kelly next why not have Kelly and Mandy get together and let Karen work on Mandy mother to now that would be super hot
I was glad it ended! I was ready to explode but wanted to finish reading it first! Amazing, amazing story.
It was wonderful reading. But if 'auntie' is truly there to help her discover herself, she needs to see to it that Mandy and Kelly experience each other - perhaps in another chapter. Also, if she is truly there to help, Auntie needs to make certain that if Mandy is bisexual she and Mother will still love and support her. Sometimes it is about the love and the feeling of closeness rather than about gender.
You've estranged Rachel and Kelly forever, and Rachel from Mandy forever. There is absolutely no doubt that Rachel will force Mandy into therapy and, when that fails, go back to her ex-husband in shame and remorse. I wouldn't rule out Rachel going after Mandy with a gun or a hammer for having "corrupted" her child, screaming how Kelly betrayed her. Please withdraw this story. Usually I love your work, but this story is a total disaster.
loved this! I hope you'll do another chapter or two. I could easily envision a strapon session, a threeway w/Kelly and finally some INCEST. Yes shy demure Rachel needs some family loving and some rough strapon lovin from Mandy........PLEEEEZE
This was incredibly erotic. A story like this would be amazing in an erotic movie. I agree with an earlier comment. A script like that would burn up the screen.
Please continue the story with Karen continuing to teach the young girl over the course of a hot and steamy weekend.
Can't wait till Kelly... Does whatever, but I want to see more of Kelly!
This makes me want a FF encounter more than ever! Excellently written...thank you!
You wrote a very compelling story of a first seduction & more than achieved your objective! Let's have more of the same!
Yes I enjoyed the build up - a well crafted story that makes sense and is redolent with the characters. And oh yes the sex is very enjoyable. From an old guy with a hankering to write something like this ...
As a fellow writer, I loved the lead up. You have a fantastic ability to give the reader enough to not stop reading as well as provide suspense and eroticism. Very well written and would love for you to continue it.
The story has to continue! Karen needs to teach Mandy everything she knows and her lust for young innocent flesh should mean an inevitable hot threesome with Mandy and the blonde bombshell Kelly. Karen could have both young teens eating out of her hand (or something else!) as she takes them into her bed. There are just so many possibilities with this amazingly hot story. You are a very gifted writer.
You HAVE to keep this story going...it has SO MANY possibilities...Karen teached Mandy much more; Mandy seduces Kelly; Karen and Mandy and Kelly seduce Rachel...together or separately...
Karen needs to take Mandy in every possible position before their weekend is over and then have the teen pleasure her over and over. Rachel walking in and finding her daughter lapping at Karen's butt would be so so naughty.
This story would be amazing as an audio story. Ravenfox does great lesbian audio and her voice with your stories would be utterly mindblowing!
Your style of writing was wonderful...the long lead in was just great! You made it so realistic and believable. You MUST continue this story..maybe more time between Karen and Mandy... with Karen getting more intimate and uninhibited with Mandy..then Mandy and Kelly together. You have so many possibilities with this story. Let us here more please!
Loved the pace of the story. Mature seduction is a fav theme of mine and this was wonderfully done
This is such a HOT story! A sequel is LONG overdue!! Please do one soon!
Love gentle loving erotic stories with a little potential stress that works itself out smoothly. For me at least, this is how people should treat each other.
I would like to hear about Mandy and Kelly. Perhaps Karen and Rachel could also become better friends.
Thank you for your stories!
To hell with Kelly, I want you to do Mandy's Mum in the next chapter.
I love the stories everything was perfectly balanced build up to the actual sex and I want to hear what happens with Kelly
Totally love your writing style, the slow deliciously detailed descriptions, arousing to the max. writing at this level is an art form, and you are an artist. Thanks for sharing this talent!!
Well written and all the time absorbing, right to the end, I hope there is a sequel, I'm new here and will look. Thanks again
You are fantastic, hope to read more, hope to hear about Kelly...
THANK YOU FOR THE LOVE AND UNDERSTANDING YOU PUT IN THE STORY. I HAVE BEEN LOOKING FOR A TEACHER BUT SO FAR NO LUCK. IN FLORIDA NORTH OF ORLANDO 441/SR46 AREA.
I don't understand people who don't like these types of stories and then make a comment about how they don't like them. If you don't like them don't read them. There are a lot of people like myself who do like these stories esoecially when it is well written.
I enjoyed the pace of the story and the delightful descriptions of their first experience together. I look forward to more with the two of them and (I hope) with Kelly too. This was so easy to identify with...The movement, the dialogue and the release of inhibitions as the encounter grows. I loved the premise and have often thought about what it would be like to a younger lover. This was a very nice way to explore the thought. It made me wet...I guess that suns it up. Thank you.
You are totally correct; what she did to her best friend's daughter was despicable. But GET OVER IT! Go to a different site if you want to read morality stories. These are sexual fantasies. The great thing about sexual fantasies is that they allow for sex without consequences. There are no unwanted pregnancies, no one gets a STD, no one is shot by a jealous lover. In real life, yes there probably would be incredible problems cases by this sexual activity but in fantasies, everyone can live happily ever after.
This was an awesome story, I LOVED IT, MY DICK LOVED IT ALSO, I ABOUT BEAT THE POOR THING TO DEATH.!!! Please I want u to THRILL us with more stories like this !!! I'm in love!!!
OHHH HOW I wish there was a part# 2 and # 3. Even one where Karen samples Rachel, and Kelly. OHHH MY.
🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹 dozen roses and 5🌟's
The clamour for further liasions between your characters is understandable. I think that your reluctance to expand your original concept for the story is right. You might be able to tack another chapter onto it, but there is a very big risk that the storyline becomes tired and begins to undermine and diminish the original. I think you are smart enough to know this. The character profiles can be kept on file and amended or developed for other stories as you continue to write. Ignore the detractor who wanted you to withdraw the story. No lesbian would look a gift horse in the mouth!!!
I loved the story.To make love with a knowledgeable someone you care about (when you desire it) as a first experience would be much better than all the negatives many first timers have to go through.
I would like another story with Mandy seducing Kelly with the older neighbor's help. Two young women seduced by an older woman is hot if written well. Maybe another follow on story would reveal Kelly and Mandy are bisexual and share guys as well. A young stud with Kelly, Mandy and the older neighbor could be a good story as well.
Excellent story, well written, good pace and build-up, fun, sexy characters. Agree wholeheartedly with scorge30 on a team Kelly seduction. I think Mandy's mother's discomfort read like a woman suppressing her own lesbian desires (perhaps even some unconscious jealousy of her daughter for being able to explore those desires, with potential sexy drama); that could be a great avenue to explore as well.
loved your first foray into the genre. I hope there will be more. The details and dialog made it very realistic. Thank you!
I enjoyed your story very much, and thought it was well written, the pace and the build up where just right. Would like to know how the meeting with Kelly went.
I'm a fan of this genre, as well! Your story is a pleasure to read...again!
Great first effort in this genre.
You are fast becoming my favorite author.
Charming, but I really would like too see a more romantic relationship, even if it's unrealistic, and maybe to include Kelly a bit.
Beautiful thank you for your time and effort. I think it was well worth it!!
Well this was disgusting. Yes, please do write a sequel. It should start with the mother and a tire iron.
Obviously written by a male. The frequent use of ‘tits’ and ‘box’ is the biggest clue.
Karen is a contortionist: licking Mandy’s pussy while rubbing her own pussy on Mandy’s knee.
I really enj❤y reading this stories. I'ma very glad that you 2 were able to enjoy and feel good doing it. When I was growing up. My mom had a friend and I was crazy about her. But she did not feel the same.
I have read this story
about5 or 6 times. I will look for it again. I want to say THANK YOU this a Very Beautiful . And I hope both of you are happy were ever you maybe.
Some people just have the roughest job. If all the women got a hang of this, the male population would be devastated.
Great writing as usual. I loved the story very much. Thank you for your writings.
Gypieman here .Keep up the good work .I've worked enough cum to cum twice. LOVE IT. Gypieman.....
Great story. Have you written the sequel - where Mandy seduces Kelly with Karen's help? The 3 of them having a hot lesbian time?
Oh My, what a beautiful story, so very well written and beautifully told. As others have commented, there is so much more to be told of this story. We all hope that you consider doing it. Thank You Jennifer
Thank you for this Story… you should definitely write more of those…perhaps expand this one…
One ideal ending is Rachel walking into Mandy's bedroom, finds her and Kelly having sex, breaks down and cries, Mandy calls Karen, and Rachel confesses she watched lesbian porn privately to "get" her daughter, got very turned on., Out of town, a woman seduced her but she backed out, but wanted to, wants to now, they have a fourway. The End--You extended it lots of juicy details, Great.
Wonderful story and so well written. Mandy is a lucky young lady and Kelly will be so soon. I liked the suggestion in a comment about Mandy's mom getting sucked into the action. This story should be included in a training manual.
You were right, taking your time building up the story is far better then rushing through it. Thanks for warming me up. 😘
Nice build up to the story you kept the mood all the way through you should have wrote another bringing the other girl in and explaining if that was the only time they got to play or if they kept it up afterwards
Another great story. I really adore your description of sex between two women, especially the older-younger storyline. I keep thinking of mother-daughter. As a man, I am turned on thinking of two women making love. I believe men would be better lovers if they would read and understand stories of lesbian love. I also have a breast fetish and love how you ensure at least one of the women has a full bosom. I’ll keep reading and you keep writing.
Good premise, some things confused me and distracted from the story, in chapter one the mom had said she would grill that weekend, in chapter two it's established that she wasn't even supposed to be there. One of them could be forgetful but yea...
Where I'm from a lipstick lesbian is the opposite of a butch lesbian so that remark in that setting was weird. She would be a lipstick lesbian herself. Also some of the sex positions are just painful to read. Good build-up though liked that.
Hot story, but there is no way in hell you can be eating a pussy while having that persons knee rubbing your pussy unless the girl being eaten is like 8' tall...or the one doing the eating is like 2' tall.
Excellent story as always. Love the slow build to the final reward. Please make this a series and share Mandy's invitation to Kelly. Maybe a poolside threesome after
A re-read, poss even a 3rd (it is 9 yrs old...!), and just as hot as 1st time...
-LOVE the pic you paint of her mature (scheming) cougar bod and Mandy's teen-ish kitten bod-a true spaghetti babe...autobiographical-?
PS Impressive string of W's for your stories since 2019!
As a newbie here I was unsure about what I would get. However, this story delivered over and over, it was hot and so sensual. At first I thought I might be overly long but there is a reason for the length of the story.....to give the details that are needed to ensure the reader is engrossed. Please write more, this whole scenario kept me hot and attentive. Thank you so much.
Enjoy your storytelling-must keep you hard for the duration of its creation. Would like an extended version as Kelly is brought into the fold, of course in a threesome. Maybe even Mandy’s mom being turned on her trip and coming home to surprise everyone in a threesome or even a foursome.
This is a great one and erotic too! I was the one to masturbate to this as it was totally erotic
What Mandy and Karen felt is how I feel when making love to a woman and I'm a male but not a sissy boy. But I sure do enjoy licking, sucking, probing and swallowing a woman's love potion