All Comments on 'A Demon's Embrace'

You really need some serious proofreading. A 'worriers body'?

The story he potential. Good character development.

You can't tell someone the made spelling mistakes and then say "The story he potential".

Good, but you really do need proofreading.

yes you can. that's the point of constructive criticism

This has been my favorite story in literotica and I have read A LOT of their stories

This has the makings of a really good story, but correcting basic grammatical errors takes away from the reading experience.

The story would be very entertaining. Bad English spoils it.

I want more :( <3 Awesome ambiance. Loved the context and characters. Would LOVE to have more :)

I like the direction you are going with this but I cannot bring myself to get past the first page. The "caves" instead of calves really got to me. You need an editor, or even go back through it on your own. This could be really good if you took the time to come back to it and fix the minor issues.