All Comments on 'What Happens in Vegas...'

This is "Part 1", correct? I'll leave any category comments off until we see the continuation, assuming there is one.

WTF?

if its a serial let us know, so we don't read it until all is out

I have to agree with the other commenters. This story began in a confusing way, rushed through the action, and didn't seem to have an ending. I'm not sure why you would've submitted this story as written.

to this story we all know you'll read it and masturbate your little cockette and then bitch about the husband vbeing a wimp and the wife a whore, but dear Annony!! ! you're just like him!!

Author , i commend you attempting to write a story on here. That is the only way to improve is by doing. Anyone can read stories all day long and think themselves qualified to judge a story. The only thing that a reader can do is either like it or don't.

It is when you jump into the fire and write that you begin to understand stories and become qualified to judge stories. I challenge all of the nay sayers of this story to show us their stories! Keep writing and don't be afraid to ask advice from some of the more experienced writers on the site.

You show promise and you will get better the more stories you write.

This (chapter?) just STOPS! Not terribly clear before it stops, but it stops at a weird stage of the story ... IF this IS, in fact, a series!

1* to date

Her 'tail' was up in the air? maybe wrong cat. author....just saying. 1*

Your title needs to indicate that this is a series. Not fair to your readers unless you do.

I hope to read more soon!

Rubbing her knub in her hotbox. This guy sure didn't major in English, or sexy dialogue.