All Comments on 'South Mountain Pack Ch. 14'

Yeah...I love it....I read everything you post...the first day!!!! Keep going...please. ♥

Fantastic read as always. So much going on, but Morgan and doms first kiss was worth waiting for. Lorenzo, when will that boy get a clue? Anthony and sophia are so good together. The prophecys and reveal about the Millers outstanding. Braveheart is one of my favorite movies. Going to read it again to see what I missed.

As I have told you awesome now i hope you can keep the muse flowing and you can do one more this month

OH I LVOED THIS CHAPTER! AND YES CAPS IS NECESSARY! It was awesome! You had me laughing so much and I couldn't stop reading I just had to find out what was going on and lorenzo is such an idiot and damien is being an ass and i really want paulo to find a mate because he is so sweet and smart and i love him and i need to know who luc's mate is and i need to know more about victoria and i need to know why no one from the pack met any of their mate's in the other pack and they so should have and i just can't stop feeling so excited and YEA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Great build up. Great story line. Great love interests. Truly great literature. A page turner. Looking forward to reading more and getting more of my questions answered as the story continues to unfold. -Diva

PBL - this is the best chapter so far i reckon.

What a brilliant story - loving the development of the storyline and the characters.

I cannot wait for Lorenzo to come to the realisation that Erin is his mate.

PBL, where do I begin? You have outdone yourself once again and the revelation at the end about the millers, you hit it out of the ballpark. I felt like I was in the study with them it was so descriptive comparing the color of whiskey and the sounds of the ice clinking. Lorenzo, I'd like to shake some sense into him. Damian as usual was hysterical. Sal manning up with Gabby. Carlo getting paternal with Sophia brought me to tears. Interestnig twist with the older women possibly going in heat. Does that mean Gina may have another little one? And the clan with the little ones does it get any better to see them together? Absolute fantastic read.

Please, please, please, a million times please.... Don't pair Victoria with Luc. He sounds like a great, kind hearted soul... Just to be paired up with her. Luna help them if they are, they're gonna have to go through some issues before things get good. Also, I like the whole "Meet & Mingle" idea. I'm kinda hoping one of the younger daughter's of Todd and Holly are mates to the sons of Tristan. Just to unify them some more.. But that's just me babbling!

TL:DR I love your work, never stop, finish this baby up. I'll always look for ya!

Leave it at Paulo cracking the hard drive I really want to know who Victorias mate is ..... you really really need to thinkabout turning this into a book.. I know it will be bigger then twilight loL CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER I tell my husband all the time when a new chapter posts not to bother me lmao

I loved this chapter!!! Damian had me laughing so hard. The exchange between Carlo and Sophia had me in tears. PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE don't make us wait so long for the next chapter.

Victoria got off too lightly! She should be under house arrest with no allowance and no new clothes. She should be given chores at home and community service. If she were captured by an enemy, she would divulge everything she knows about her pack on the promise of power and prestige!

The mating dance of the Carlucci's and the Miller's is crazy hilarious! Right now Dante is absolutely correct about a certain pair of young Carlucci males. They really are stupid!

If mated couples are going to feel compelled to breed in the face of impending war, will intended couples also feel this compulsion, even though they are not yet old enough to mate?

Worth the wait as usual, thank you for the update. the loser cry baby in me got teary twice throughout this chappie, Carlo n Sophia I mean I can't :'( it was beautiful n Carlo talking about Angelica. I love how even when they are prepping for war or being werewolves they are incredible fathers, the interactions are beyond sweet and realistic. I feel kinda sad for Paulo, he needs his youth but then its amazing how deeply he cares and takes his responsibility seriously, which brings us back to the amazing that is the fathers. Since Carlo, Joe and Frank are all Alphas or alpha capable how do they not overstep or accidently dethrone Carlo when sparring. babbling but before I stop the loyalty is amazing and not as clearly seen in other stories in the genre, I love how its family first and that is defined by blood and pack. okay I'm done, this was great thank you once again

I love how you leave use hanging so we come back for more. so please please hurry with chapter 15. I cant wait for it to come out.

This is from the authors blog, as always her attention to detail is amazing:

"The "Cold Storm' was an actual event that took place in 1857. Frigid arctic air and back to back blizzards pummeled the East coast and brought record low temps some of which still stand to this day.

'Swift's Silver Mine' is a mine that is purported to be in Southwestern VA or Eastern Kentucky. Supposedly lost for over 240 years people are still looking for it to this day.

The actual dates and times for Anthony's birth and conception are actual dates of solar eclipses and Sophia's 18th birthday is a full moon."

Kudos for the length! That's worth the wait. Judging by the cliff hanger, needless to say, I can't wait for the next chapter. Paulo is my favorite character. Next is Sal.

Highlight in this chapter: Dante's revelation. I have been looking forward to this, what the silver eyes meant and now here it is :D

But I still appreciate the Tribunal, the details on security measures, the dates...

About Victoria's punishment, I expected an equivalent of Community Service. The problem with her, as mentioned in this chapter, is that she feels so entitled just because she is the Senator's daughter. A Senator is a public official, his main job is to serve the people, and she doesn't quite grasp that. So not being able to participate in social events or attend parties, is hardly a punishment.

The security measures gives me relief but the downside is that, it kills the tension or the conflict. I just know they would survive the attack, not to mention strong packs forming alliances with them. Not that I don't want them to live. I think I am just looking for that feeling of uncertainty and fear that they might not make it. But with the way things are, it's too perfect, I don't think they should even be concerned about Charles.

Other than proofreading to rid off some minor mistakes (like the second sentence of this chapter: "The youngsters under the age of fifteen were in the observation room with the sound turned off so they were unable to hear and when The Tribunal commenced the curtains would be drawn." Either get rid of 'and' or add another word after 'and'.), I suggest avoiding too much repetition. (Readers know since chapter one how the males would lay down their lives for the females or how overprotective they are. It's fun to see them get jealous, but it gets...redundant.) Make the chapters more solid and meaty.

Keep writing.

I love the chapter so much. my favs will always be Anthony and Sophia. I can't wait for Lorenzo to finally get it..then we have the other Carlucci boys. I really don't like Victoria maybe something awful can happen to her

I was wondering why they brought pocketbooks to a date, I mean... do they expect it to be boring and want to have a good story to read for distraction? I googled it and found out pocketbook also means purse. LoL, that made much more sense. ;)

i think damian is really going to be a great foil for ant when they take over the pack.just as frank is for carlo.1 thing though at the game you had damian and caitlin at the start of the tripping scene then it switched to lorenzo and erin.i also think victoria is going to come back to bite them in the ass.

read that part again. Damian gave Caitlin his hoodie then glared at the boys staring at her. Then lorenzo gave Erin his hoodie. What was confusing about that? I've read it three times so far and it gets better every time.

about Victoria. She's too power hungry, and that greed will lead her to the enemy and play right into their plans. All they will have to do is offer her an Alpha and she'd hand over her own pack, family and all.

I truly hope Luna punishes her by taking away her true mate and giving him a mate that he deserves...a second-chance mate.

Also, because the bad guys (Charles and his ilk) have been hunting girls for years, and destroying families to get them, I could see couples being needed for the orphaned ones, as the story progresses I could see Matt and Phil finally getting their opportunity to be parents.

Another thought, I'll bet there are some surprises coming up with the matings and I would not be at all shocked to see more gay couples showing up. Could be why some can't "find" their mate.

Thanks for the update. I always look forward to reading them!

I can't wait for the next part. Victoria is going to be a problem. I feel sorry for her mate. This is my favorite story to follow. Keep up the great work.

First off, I'm so glad this is out, and I'm glad you had a good Mother's Day. I'm curious to see who Victoria's true mate is (I really hope it's not one of the Carlucci's....), but know that unless she changes, she most likely won't actually deserve him. I'm glad you didn't have them banish her, or send her away somewhere -- I guess since she's not 18 yet, they can't. I guess that would also be why if she was sent away, so to would the rest of her family. They need to keep a close eye on her though. Of course, you know that :P.

So much went on in this chapter. The only real criticism I have -- constructive, I promise! -- is when you switch between character groups in different locations and such, it would be nice if there was some visual break. Like ***** or ~~~~ or something, just to help us see that you're going to a different area. As long as we're paying attention we can see that with the change in which characters are included, but it would still be easier to read if there was a visual break. Also, who is Luc's mate?!?!?!? I got the feeling it was someone in Italy, but I'm actually clueless.

Way to go Paulo with cracking the code. Boo to you for ending there, haha. Thanks again for a great chapter. I will use my school practice as a distraction against waiting for the next update!

~SH

it seriously needs some sex scenes. Yes, you're focused on the teenagers now, but this is Literotica after all.

I read some of the comments and I see that we are all in agreement that Victoria should die a horrible death. I'm just saying. If you have it will you post the recipe for the Cherry Cream Cheese Brownies on the blog? I feel like my life will not be complete unless I have these. So I really really hope you have it! :) If not I may have to Google it or create my own. Love the chapter soooo much!!

Thanks for your latest post. I agree that some sort of visual clue when switching between scenes would be helpful.

Even though this is Literotica, having a sex scene in this story would seem a bit out of place as the rest of the story is about self control, respecting their mates ages and big brothers all being over protective and such, even having mum and dad having sex you would almost feel like covering your eyes and humming!!!! It's just the way the story is.

Don't get me wrong I hang out for the updates and love the story to bits.

I agree that Victoria is going to be a problem child, can easily seeing her jumping camp to get what she wants. Maybe she could get captured and a bit of torture ( heee, heee) and then redeem herself and see the error of her ways.

Thanks for the update

We have been given some clues about Victoria's mate. Victoria was thinking about him as a mere beta who was fussing over his sister. And if it was a Carlucci she would have ranted about dog house builders. So, who is ranked as a beta, has a sister, and is not a Carlucci? Whoever it is, I pity him.

That was a long chapter. The switching between the groups at home and the date night kind of got confusing. Can't wait till the lightbulb fully comes on for Damian and Lorenzo concerning their intendeds. For Damian to always joke and claim he is smart, he sure is quite slow with noticing the obvious.

Victoria knows who her mate is, does he know that she is his? Sucks big time for him along with her family. She is going to get herself seriously hurt or killed trying to claim someone that doesn't belong to her. Nice twist at the end with the Millers.

That was amazing. I hope that you post more soon.

Like how the threat(s) against the pack are bubbling to the surface.

I agree with others that a bit more clarity on the scene changes would help-- several empty lines, a bar line, star grouping-- something. I read a a good pace and tripped up on several changes. Few things kill the fun of a story on a roll like having to stop and figure out 'wait, what?'.

The story itself continues to rock. And you keep teasing the bakery name....

I have been waiting for a new chapter. It was great read had me laughing a lot. How ever the changes between scenes are quite confusing. But otherwise I have loved this series and are waiting for mor chapters.

Loved it as always. Yes the caps were needed but like others I did find the scene changes took me a second to follow. I agree a line or something would be a great help.

"She glanced over and looked at her mate in disdain; that’s what Luna paired her with? She was disgusted by his subservient attitude and his fawning over his stupid sister. She deserved an Alpha, not some lowly Beta and she was going to make sure it happened."

- Beta, subservient, fawning, stupid sister

- I think her mate could be Jade or Daisy's brother. They were crying and so their response was to comfort them, which from Victoria's skewed point of view, is "fawning".

- I thought it was Paulo (God forbid. Please. Don't let it be one of the Carluccis or Morettis -_-) and the "stupid sister" is Maria. But Alberto is with Maria. And Paulo is with his laptop ahaha xD

I like this story so much for me to be invested in the characters, to feel concerned with this new development. Victoria has a mate *shudders*

I've stop reading in this website but just for you I come around every 3 months to check out what you got for us. I'm so in love with this story!! only a very good writer can hook us up like this. Keep it up!!

Like some others I no longer frequent this site but keep checking back for your story. Please keep writing. I'm in love with the characters can't wait to find out what happens next.

Victoria should be taken to the vet and put down, end of problem. Alright I know that won't happen just wishful thinking on my part. lol Which ever brother she ends up with he has my deepest sympathy no one deserves a bitch that is such a bitch. lol

Your story is great, and I appreciate your effort to accurately write Italian...but on subtle issues the translation program failed. Luc made a reference to a future mate, which translated as "my future male friend" and they sometimes used the formal Lei/si form instead of the informal Tu/ti form among family.

Again, great story line - Cheers!

I never said I was fluent in Italian, the only Italian I know is curse words and their accompanying phrases. I'm also really good with hand gestures. I ran what I wanted to say through 3 translation programs, copied them, made sure they said the same thing and then moved on. I'm sorry some words were 'formal' instead of 'familial' and I guess I should have made it more specific to say 'female mate' instead of 'mate' when Luc was speaking, but I thought it was obvious and I missed the male version in the translation. If thats the only thing you can pick on in the entire 91 pages of Word then I'm satisfied.

Oh, and send me your email so I can send everything I need translated to you since you are obviously an expert on the language.

I've read this entire series over the last couple of days. It has truly been a delight. I've laughed out loud and even mentioned possibly Lo'Jacking our childrens shoes since they walk home from school. ;)

As some have commented I also check frequently for this storyline.

Truly loving it, keep up with this great story.

Love this series.

The recipe for the Cherry Bliss Brownies is now up on the blog under the 'Recipes from the Millers Bakery' page. I was going to put it up before and simply forgot. There are also pics of Alpha Legrand, and Rain on 'Those important to the Pack', as well as the new prophecy that was revealed.

Just another fantastic chapter. I stayed up WAY too late reading it the other night until 1am but it was worth it even if I felt hung-over at work the next day. :-) I can't get over how much I love all of the characters in this story and how you manage to make all of them so real. There are so damn many! Amazing. LOVE Lorenzo and Erin and Damian and Caitlin. I really thought they were finally going to realize they were the girls mates on the date, but I guess I'll have to be patient longer. I really laughed at Lorenzo trapping Erin in is hoodie at the game and pulling her along by the strings. LOL! I could just picture it so vividly and it was hilarious!! Victoria is definitely the mate of one of Jade or Daisy's brothers. That's how I read it and there is NO WAY Luna woud pair her with a Carlucci. It would never work. Also dying to see who Luc's mate is. The Millers!! Descended from DeMornay - wow - that was awesome. And they could be the big rulers of the Scottish packs AND all of Europe!?!? Good thing Todd is destined to have all those Carlucci son in laws to divvy up the power. :-)

I can't wait to hear more about that and to see Todd really let loose on the power they say he has. Not to mention Anthony. It's getting pretty obvious that with all of these powerful wolves being related by marriage that peace will have no choice but to reign in the land again! I loved that you had Matt and Phil on the date and showed how protective they are of the girls. And Todd with the lipstick covered boys!!! LOL again! I loved it. And I really hope that Carlo and Gina get to have a little girl or twin girls. They were so sweet in the car with Maeve and Fiona. They deserve another chance for a daughter. And like everyone else, I'm really starting to love Paulo and hope he finds a mate too. And I really liked that you had Joe pushing him to take time off from being serious to have fun with the other kids too. The family values in this story are just great to see. Finally, I'll wrap it up by saying I can't get enough of the "clan" of little ones and their interactions with the Carlucci boys. Makes me laugh every time. Too cute. Please post again as soon as humanly possible. I can't get enough. 5 Stars!!! ~K.

This story is so well written that I am astounded. I have been ensnared by the magic of your words.

Amazing, love the de Moray touch (family name)

Kudo's

As Always. I'm addicted and cannot wait for chapter 15. :)

This chapter❤️ gosh please don't wait so long to update again! I seriously stalk your page faithfully lol. I love this series so much! Keep up with the amazing work. I love my Damien so much!

YOU ROCKED THIS CHAPTER FROM START TO FINISH. CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT INSTALLMENT. I saw alot of readers were confused when you switched scenes my advice would be to read a little slower. i know it's hard since they love this story and get overly excited when they're reading it but i promise it will work. i'm not downing anyone just a suggestion. sometimes i read too fast and have to back track but that's what happens when the story is this/that damn good.

i think victoria should be left out of all security info since i feel she's going to betray the pack with her envy, jealousy & greed. Actually they should pair her with Sophia and let Sophia whip Victoria's ass so Victoria will realize that Sophia isn't scared of her.

To the readers looking for sex: read another story when you're horny. This story is great the way it is.

OK, BREAK OVER. NEXT CHAPTER TODAY NOT TOMORROW!!!!!!!!!!.Justing joking. NOT!!!!!

THANKS FOR A GREAT STORY.

storyline great but way too much irrelevant detail

or should your name be asshat? who are you to say what is irrelevant? what would yuo leave out? her dedicated fans love her writing and the details she puts in her stories make it even more real to us. the battle that is comig is life or death and knowing these details gives us comfort that the ones we care about in the pack will survive.

I agree. No trouble following. Well written. Very creative and FUNNY!!!!! Keep the chapters coming

your story is great cant wait until the next chapter, please write more soon.

This story has entrenched stereotypical gender roles and the one female character that shows any sort of assertive tendencies, instead of depending on what she could do for herself, she is made into a brat. All the females are 'girly'. There are no 'tomboys'. Only one female has a true position of power and, she is only a peripheral character who got her position indirectly from a male. In fact ALL the females get their power from the males w/whom they are associated. And the males having their own meetings reeks of 'seperate but equal'. By having meetings where the females are excluded means they are never part of the decision making process. It means that the females are not partners but, something less. Also, the 'possessiveness' of the males is borderline psychotic. And emphasizing the fact that the females have to manipulate emotions as a means to get what they want is indicative of human cultures where females are not considered equal (third world countries). And not only are they manipulative, they have to maintain 'appropriate'behavior while the males can cuss their balls off. And no one stopped Lorenzo from yelling and cursing at that poor girl. By not stopping it, they are giving consent for it to happen again, no matter that they have a 'talk' later. Anthony has the authority to not only discipline but punish Lorenzo but he didn't. Slippery slope. Yelling and screaming today, hitting tomorrow.

So, yes to add to my laundry list, the double standards for sexuality is unfortunate. The guys can go out and dp some girl but, my interpretation about the female that participated (way back in the beginning of the story) was that she was a slut for it. Also, considering the male to female wolf ratio is so skewed, why aren't more polyamorous groupings occurring? So, I could go on and on... But, I know that this is the culture you have created.

Still, your sense of humor is enjoyable. And I love the all the details.

Wow. I very seldom respond to comments, but I'll give it a go.

First of all, where specifically are the 'Stereotypical gender roles'? 1-Sophia and Maria are girly, but they're 15 years old. They can also kick ass when needed and when they were playing Carlucci Golf, their brothers warned Ant, Alberto and Angelo to keep an eye on them, not that they thought the boys would hurt them, but the girls would hurt THEM. The boys are constantly talking about how strong their fighting skills are and that they hate sparring against them. 2- Gabby works in her fathers pizza parlor and is a skilled fighter and doesn't take any crap from her huge older brothers and has even beat the crap out of Angelo, Lorenzo, Damian and Sal.

As far as the 'only one female has a true position of power and she is only a peripheral character who got her position indirectly from a male'. 1 - What?? I assume you're referring to Madame Alpha Gina...and yes she obtained her position by mating with the Alpha. How else would she become the Madame Alpha if it wasn't in her bloodline? 2- The Alpha of Parr Ridge Pack is a female and she didn't get her position by mating with a male, it was her destiny to be in this position.

And 'the one female character that shows any sort of assertive tendencies, instead of depending on what she could do for herself, she is made into a brat'. I'm assuming you are referring to Victoria. Have you read Chapter 13 & 14? She's not being 'assertive' in trying to steal someone's mate. She basically blackmailed two innocent girls into helping her and abused her fathers position as a Senator for her own gain. So, how is that being assertive?

The females are always included in the decision making process. The only meeting they weren't at was one meeting and Carlo explained his reason why he wanted separate meetings. Carlo consults Gina on everything and Frank and Joe do the same thing. I have no idea what the hell you're talking about with the 'third world countries' comment. Frank, Joe, and Carlo always do whatever their mates want and if you look or rather read, it's the women who hold the true power.

What did Lorenzo say that was so bad to Erin? That she was beautiful, smart, sweet, dressed nice, that she was too good for Bob, that he didn't talk to her, bring her flowers and didn't treat her the way she deserved? Oh my thats terrible, let's get the rope out and string him up now... As far as your comment "Yelling and screaming today, hitting tomorrow". I have no words for that...how you can equate that with possible domestic violence is beyond me.

I've explained before, the girls were only with them because of WHO they were, Rossi's and Carlucci's. They wanted the power, and money associated with the families and dumped Scott and his friends as soon as they saw their jackets. But you're complaining about that but then wondering why there aren't polyamorous groupings? now I'm confused.

Thanks for the note about my sense of humor...I needed it to get through your comment.

Are we reading the same story? I have read and read these stories and I've never seen what you're going on and on about. PBL was much nicer than I would have been, I would have told you to step the fuck away from the keyboard and put down the bong or the alcohol because you're obviously not comprehending what you're reading. If you don't like the story, stop reading it.

I thoroughly enjoyed your response to anon. reading your thoughts also helped me understand your characters more and gave me an insight I might otherwise have missed.

again, thank you.

B O O M !!!!

Lol

I see why you want to remain anonymous. I don't even have words but lets be honest PBL said everything that needed to be said. I think we find it hilarious that you feel the way you do but you're obviously reading this AWESOME story. Well I will leave it at that. I look forward to your comment on the next chapter as I am sure you will be reading.

ABSOLUTE torture having to wait for the next part!!

When will Lorenzo finally realize that Erin is his mate?! I'm dying for this couple to get together!!! He has so much making up to do.

I am the unfortunate heir of the bastard named De Moray. I hate the fact that "Men" felt women were beneath them. Catherine Queen of Scot's was killed on a stupid mans idea, of the "World". reminds me of the Islamic terrorist who kill people, because they refuse to agree with "the Islamic Idea of Religion".

I hate that people are unable to remove self-interest from the world. De Moray is something my family is living down, we have even changed our names and requested new names on our birth certificates. Who wants to carry a murder's name?

Huh? Don't understand a thing you said. Sir Andrew de Moray was a Scottish hero, known as "The Guardian of Scotland" who fought alongside William Wallace in the Scottish Wars of Independence.

Who exactly is Catherine, Queen of Scots? Mary was the Queen of Scots. Again, not sure where you're going with this.

I have no idea what Islam has to do with my story or your comparison to it.

If you are true heirs of de Moray, then you would be related to a Duke. So, why are you changing your names and requesting new birth certificates? Again, I don't understand what you're talking about.

Like the earlier ch.s a great read. Hope your inspiration continues and time constraints do not stop/retard you bringing your story to a fabulous conclusion

I really enjoy reading your story. When are you going to post the next chapter? I really hope you continue

please post the next chapters I keep a check and cant wait to have your updates, your story is getting really great and cant wait for it to keep going, hope Luc makes his mate happy, just hope you don't give a mate like Victoria, she is so hateful and self centered.

Adding my pleas to that of the others! Hurry up and update please pocketbooklover!!!

I love love this please keep it coming

I am anticpating your next chapter, soon please!

Please update soon cant wait for the next chapter

Please please next chapter

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE next chapter!!!!!!!!

Good story. But it takes you way to long to write one chapter. It makes it not worth reading when you take as long as you do for each chapter.

Show a little compassion. Our beloved author has been dealing with serious health issues including numerous hospital stays including multiple surgeries. she posts updates on her blog and fb page.

You write quite well, the best thing for me is that this story has made me laugh out loud numerous times, some of the stuff you come up with is unbelievably funny and cute :). I just wish I'd waited to read this story until it was completed, because large gaps between chapters breaks the flow of the story... For the future, maybe it might be a good idea to post only after the whole story is completed, because few things are as frustrating as not having closure on a gripping storyline... Either way, when it comes to writing, you are really something amazing!

I stopped reading in April. I returned in August knocked out chap 13 &14. Now i have to go find something else to read. I'll be waiting for next chapter though

have been standing by for the next chapter, wasnt dissapointed. love it to pieces!

Ok it's September, time to post a new chapter. I've waited patiently all summer please do not hold the next chapter for ransom. I really do love the story and am invested in it!

Please I am in total need of another chapter. My mind is going omg yes Paulo cracked it and the mystery of a few things unfolding has drawn me in so much. This story is bloody brilliant.

Please add the next chapter as soon as possible. I've checked in every day all summer waiting for your next submission and the continuation of this great story. Please don't make us all wait very much longer.

More please. Soon

Finally am up to date on your story and have rated them. Loved what I've read so far. Hope yer feeling better and the doctor's appts aren't pulling you down. Take care and I'll still keep reading whenever you put up the next chapter :)

Please, please,please can we have the next chapter

Amazing. I want to know more!!! What happens next? Please add another chapter.

I can tell you now if you make this into a book I would buy it the day it hit shelves =] hope to read more soon!!

Please update soon, PBL! I am so in love with this series that I check for updates almost obsessively!! I need another fix and soon:)

when are the next chapter comming ?

this is seriously nerve wrecking... please please please, don't leave the story unfinished!!! and please give Paulo a good mate, he deserves :) right after Damian he's my favourite :D

please add the next chapter. plus i can't wait for the other boys to get girls.

Pleases don't stop your story before it's done like so many have

This just gets better and better!!!!!

Good story but this dragging out Lorenzo and Damian mate thing is getting old. I know this is real old story but still maybe other writers see this. The mate thing was funny at first but it’s the same thing over and over. Dude blows up because of other guys then says he don’t like her. It could have been changed up or L & D admitting they are girls’ mates but claim they don’t want mates yet and fight it. You made the “pull” seem all consuming but now it’s not. Even Sal which is too young to feel it is feeling it. It’s really making me dislike L and the other guys. He has been allowed to talk to this girl like that with no consequence. Every thing Erin and her sisters been through and no one is shutting Lorenzo up. They should be kicking his ass every time his voice raises toward her. He needs exiled. Other than this it is a great story. It’s just this is going against everything your story claims the guys are supposed to be.

Oh well. The Lorenzo & Damian mating thing may seem old - but it it is still just a matter of weeks in the story. The story is realistic in the sense that some things may take time.