All Comments on 'My Sister Natalie'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
cheating

cheating stories are never good. if he wasn't married and this was longer it could have been good but you failed big time.

DBRS

slide64slide64about 13 years ago
excellent

this was a really good story - in fact all of your stuff is good - please keep writing - very sensual!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
More please.

I want to see more from these three...Slightly more descriptive though. This was way too short.

PhineasNPhineasNover 6 years ago
You really need to proofread

The frequency of grammar/spelling mistakes almost makes this story unreadable. Please proofread at least a little if you're not going to have someone else edit it for you. And add length. Short stories suck.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Phineasasss!!!

Who cares about spelling and grammar mistakes? That's not why you came to this site now is it? Now be a good boy and clean your room up before dinner.

WretchedMonkeyWretchedMonkeyabout 6 years ago
Too many errors

So I stopped reading after the 2nd paragraph. Check your work or get someone to check it for you otherwise you'll never retain readers.

LegallySaneLegallySanealmost 3 years ago

Brother is just a "boy toy" to them. He should just leave and go back to his wife. 3*

otti1otti1over 2 years ago

Schöne Geschichte. Super geil geschrieben.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Only tomorrow never came, now 19 years later...

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

And now 20 years later....

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